All Comments on 'Loving Master'

A very well written piece earned you good marks, but too many unanswered questions in this relatively short story for full on top marks. Interesting spin!

This was a very good first submission - a bit on the short side and vaguely unsatisfying, but well-written and competent. Keep writing - it is the only way to improve - and you have started well. Welcome and please have five stars for a really fine effort.

There need to be more voices of the gentle, loving style of D/S. Tell us more!

Short, but sensual and erotic. By all means, continue writing and post more.