by nickiche
Please post Part 2. A great first story. A suggestion (not a criticism) for you. Proof your stories for minor grammatical errors. Try reading your story out loud. That's an easy way to catch them or have a trustworthy friend proof. I look forward to more stories from you. Thanks. ChristieP
Can't wait to hear what happens (after they dump the guys) :)
The girls should just fess up and leave thier boyfriends, no point staying with someone you care nothing for.
Please continue the story. I like the descriptions of their interaction. It paints a nice scene :)
I love the way you describe the true passion between the two girls. I can feel the heat just reading it. Please continue.
omg please continue this. this was so good and got me so hot while reading it. i love how you described things. but please,if the girls get together, please dont let the boyfriends be involved
this a very good story.sweet and sensual.please give us the second part.cant wait to hear what happens next.please,please.
The story build-up is great!!
You should keep writing!!!
I'll be watching for the next one!! <3 :D
Nice story but "dose" is not "does", and more. Spell check doesn't quite do the job a good editor would.
I guess I like a story with more of a build up so it wasn't a favorite of mine.
Thank You Very Much For The Build Up
To The "KISS" !
But May We Have Chapter 2, Now. PLEASE