All Comments on 'My First Noel'

Needs more...a lot more! Just a good basis for a continuation..

Wow, the dominance isn't really my style, but your first couple of paragraphs really hooked me... Then it went downhill from there. I loved the way he was basically talking to the reader to start out with, and what a guy, but the change from that to the actual event of what he had previously described wasn't so smooth. Excellent description, can't complain too much about your spelling or grammar, but what was with her grabbing his leg all the time and not his big hard throbbing cock!?

nice flow, good language, hot descriptions... short and sweet is sometimes the way to go!