by hard_cock105
HI THERE , nice work a little on the short side but well done ,look to see the next part hope it is soon .
This is really hot. Craving for more! I wanna cum while reading the next chapter ;)
If you are going to a story like this, lead up to it a bit. Have some backstory. Have the mom tease a bit, flirting, "accidental" flash, etc. This story should have been the last chapter of many. Anticipation is key.
You've made a decent effort at a good story, but a great sequel will more than make up for the gaps in the first chapter.
Don't stop now! You're just getting started. Take her the way she wants it!