All Comments on 'My Green Eyed Conquistador Ch. 01'

That is some serious juju Alex got rooted in homegirl. She is still not over him after a few years and was celibate.

All these short one page stories are ridiculous. It is more infuriating than suspenseful.

Better than most of what I read here nowadays. Hopefully you'll continue it.

its good for the first chapter but I hope and pray he doesn't use her a toy or i should say his little sex toy pet and he is the master. I hope the love thing there grows into more then what it was in their past. I hope he saws her more love even tho he gotten her the way she is now. I feel sorry in away for her because he was her first and he knows they will be together for ever but I hope she can learn to take some control in that relationship and not let him control her all the time. Which im not saying is a bad this she might like that but it would be fun to see the tables turn

Firstly i found the chapter way to short.. Secondly; I like her and i hope she doesn't bow down to his dominance. It took him a week after they first parted to replace her and humiliate her infront of close friends of them both. He's a pig and doesnt deserve her this time round. I would like to see him work his ass off trying to win her back and realise what a gem she really is.. I dont like him and she deserves better, give him a little competition. Be nice to see another male taking a serious interest in her that will light a fire under his ass.

Really enjoyed the beginning, but like others I hope it is more of a love connection.

Side note to fellow readers: I have been helping an author on Lit. with her stories. When I receive them the stories are 5-6 pages on WORD. Some how during the formatting on Lit. those pages are reduced to one. I would say the writers are not intentionally doing one page chapters...jmo

I definitely liked it. I meant that if a story is good, such as this one, having such suort chapters is infuriating. Two or three pages would be soooo much better and more exciting. Just an FYI.

This is like the 5th one page chapter I've read in the last 3 days! I hate hate hate it. Please let the next one be longer, I beg of you. Hahaha

Thanks to the readers who rated my story, left comments & sent feedback. Please know that Chap 1 of this story was 5 pages in Word. My apologies for its short length here on Lit. The next chapters will definitely be longer. Thanks again for reading, rating and commenting! xoxo

She broke up with Alex even though she loved because of her parents and has been miserable ever since. It's a good that Alex never gave up on her even though he dated other woman. I can't wait to read more, bring it on!!

Alex is a tool and an asshole I personally find nothing swoon worthy about him he seems very condensing and demeaning to her by basically treating her like a play thing. But this is only chapter one so I will wait and see how this story and he developes but hopefully she gets a backbone and stand up for herself by putting him in his place either he can be by her side or she needs to find someone who will...she clearly lacks self esteem maybe her parents was on to something because she reads as naive even after 3 years had passed.

Just curious...

that the so called heroine ends up being weak, not the first chapter. He will have his way, and she will be pathetic for the next chapters?

Im iffy about this one. The plot & story line is nice but im confused about the characters. Alex seems like a dick, but its only the first chapter so i hope it will turn 'round. Other than that, its good (:

and him an asshole? I'm going to continue to follow the story however I'm hoping she walk out. Your story though.

Great beginning so far what's up with Alex saying that she looks like a whore? So rude! I'm already hooked so please update soon! :)

Love the story, but Alex has control issues. Sounds like a classic Dom and she seems like a Sub. Interesting. Look forward to reading more.

probably because i'm into dom and sub culture and there aren't a lot of stories like that on here involving a black woman, let alone a black woman and a latino man. i hope he continues to be dominant, and her, shy and subservient. woooo, i swear those type of pairings have the hottest scenes. and personally, i encounter metrosexual, tight ball scrunching pants and buddy holly glasses wearing, jelled up hair having dudes all day long. this is a refreshing break from all of that, even if it is fantasy.

Comeback please continue this story.