by ithappens1996
These aren't ever real and it doesn't add anything to the pathetic story to try and claim it.
Where the heck is the rest of it? First part was fantastic. I need to know how it end.
And with that u stopped? Now, I would never do what ur writing about. But "no no no... Yes, yes, yes" especially in a tale? -that's exciting!
Doesn't "no" ever really mean "no." Raped the barista and raped his mom. This is crap!
But you need an editor/proofreader. Im looking forward to the next one.
Where she's telling how she wants him to fuck, and how he goes a little overboard, has got to be the most erotic few paragraphs I've read in a while.
u have some good ideas but tried to use them all in one story. Try to stay realistic and write about time caught by mom and ur feelings
Quite a good story, with the potential of much more to come. Yes, there were some interesting 'typos' - maybe some proof reading would help.
"Marianne and I's fuckfest"???? Misspellings and other grammar errors cause the reader to stop, back up and mentally correct the mistakes. This lessons a good reading experience.
Loved it, hot horny boy with hormones raging makes a move on his mother, what will happen next with father going away. More please
The correct phrase is cliff hanger and refers to old series, usually the ones before cinema movies, where the hero ended up hanging from a cliff or similar at the end of each episode so that you had to watch the next episode.
Interesting word, "clift." Wonder what it means?
But you have created a clit hanger. Keep it going, she'll be warm to the touch in the morning.
Need the next chapter,, why stop in the middle of a story, great writing but there has to be more
Can't wait for the next chapter, please don't keep us waiting long.
Great story, but it ended like a clift hanger you have to wait all summer to find out how it ends. Please hurry if there is a chapter 2.
The story just seemed rather short, and it didn't seem like an incest/taboo story. Seemed more like it was an erotic coupling story. Still, not a bad read.