All Comments on 'My Mother is My Master Pt. 01'

With but one criticism, I noticed several misspelled words. Please use a spell-checker program to review your stories. It is a minor thing but one I find distracting while reading the story. I would very much like to read your continuation of this story.

This can turn into a ver hot and sexy story. Please keep writing

I hope your next chapter goes a little bit, or lets make it a lot farther that this one did...

We need more of you and mom, if you know what I mean...

I also noticed some errors in what otherwise is an otherwise interesting story with a lot of potential.

Several of your paragraphs end in mid sentence, either with or without a comma.

Stoty has a lot of potential. Keep it real, you have a different perspective.

Waiting for the next step.

Would love to see you develop this more! Take it slow, ramp up the tension. Have fun and keep writing :)

Please do continue .

The spacing in your story was just weird.

There was no flow to it.

Not very good I'm afraid.