by conanthe
With Karl previously.
more, More, MORE.
Please....
Earl John of Ucolta
I love the premise and the writing. You are doing a great job. Here's to hoping there are many more chapters.
One of my all time favorites on this site. Enjoy it and look forward to new chapters.
Keep up the good work. This has to be one of the best stories Ive ever read.
Man!! This series is so great! i hope you continue and finish it!! :)
MORE, MORE, MORE
Please keep this story going. Post again soon
Thank you for writing this story line i am enjoying it immensely.
Can't wait to see Millie dominated... Maybe Lara can act as a top for a change.
Very compelling story with lots of twists. Do keep in mind that for those not having attended an American University all the acronims of fraternities get confusing. Spell them out now and then please. Keep the story coming though, I greatly enjoy it.
excellent reference-- he is a huge tool.
may those poor dead hookers rest in peace
cyber crime in an erotic story. Really a nice twist. I loved how the all united against the AGs.
And I loved Millicent's conclusion, that made her have to change panties. :-D
The second to last sentence in the third paragraph of Chapter 8, you have put this word, "peripatetic" (Traveling ) but it should be "apoplectic" (Angry).
I think auto correct destroyed this sentence!
The second most often gripe I have about commentators to the Literotica stories, are the grimmer nasties. They go on and on, endlessly wailing about missedspellings and grimgrammar and obvious systematic problems caused by the mishmash of incompatible technologies we all masochistically inflict upon ourselves.
Speltczech is homophoney-phobic coded by progroomers certified to be reliably illiterate. Just enjoy the clever puns and the inadvertent malapropisms and even the oddly bent catachresis. Auto-correct functions placing the wrong word in the correct context can be hilarious!
I mean, yah gotta wonder about someone who would interrupt their sweaty fervored masturbation to chastise the author for technical problems on a free website!?!
Believe the pleasers if you need to but here at chapter 8 most of the text is rubbish. You CAN write and plot better.
Why oh why make Mei Ling a ninja. Let Big Lez and her black van friends be good at something. More heroes makes our main characters abilities less heroic. For all the fancy talk where is the drama, the test of character, and failings of our hero? So far you've told us that he can't loss - end of story.
So all the videos were rendered on the sysadmins computer even Jimmys sing-a-long? Me thinks you got a chronology problemo.
I understand the need to move ladies out of the story like Janet and Melissa so there can be room for new ones. Just remember to introduce them properly. The story doesn't improve from a new no name doing the same stuff. You didn't even follow up on Peggys miserable introduction/backstory.
The highlight of your story were showing the work of a dominant. Most stories from submissives care shit about all the work that their 'transgressors' do to get them off safely with a roar.
Really, afraid of STD (quite rightly) , and promoting ATM?
How ignorant can you be?
I think the storyline is fairly unique, though. Am curious which way it'll go.
@smartest1. Yeah this story is like Forrest Gump. Things just happen to the guy out of nowhere that adds and builds and sends him places and so on.
Arse to mouth isn’t a better or worse way to get an STD than just vaginal sex or anal sex. The mouth is the start of the digestive tract and has enzymes and other shit just to start the initial chemical breakdown of everything. So the advice currently is that you can’t get aids from giving oral unless you have a cut in your mouth.
So there are poop videos where women eat quite a bit of poop from their partner’s arse. They live.
So what you or they should be worried about is just STD’s just from having all types of sex with several people. A uni student that’s fucking a different girl each day of the weekend then leaves the girls alone for 2 days that weekend. So uni girls that are up for fucking a guy bare back that’s fucking several other women will defiantly be fucking other guys bare on the nights they are left alone.
See how the web spreads?
Normally these stories are written in a world where no STD’s exist. However in this story they are specifically mentioned and the attempts to mitigate the risk is appalling and typical for a uni guy “I’m right, I think? Are you clean as well?” Girl thinks about the last 10 guys she fucked in the last month, half that she doesn’t even know their names… “Yeah, I’m clean, I must be because the itching went away and now my pussy is just dribbling ooze showing just how horny she is for cock!!”
So yeah STD’s are a massive risk in this story and for real, he hasn’t mitigated anything BUT ARSE TO MOUTH ISN’T THE RISK HERE it’s no more of a risk than just sex.