All Comments on 'My Second Piece of Ass Ch. 12'

...on near perfection? Perfection in ANYTHING doesn't exist. Just keep on doing what you're doing, ok?

Your story just keeps getting better and better. I agree with anonymous, damn near perfect! One spelling error I saw, "heal" instead of "heel." So minor for such a major story.

Fantastic chapter. Well-written and genuinely engaging.

I'll offer a few suggestions, hoping that you get back to writing again, because you're an excellent storyteller.

Maybe you use an auto-spell correction software, which always misspells heels as heals? Yes, another reader mentioned that already. Slide instead of slid?

I like to see better punctuation, because I see it as a signal of the inflections in a narrator's storytelling. Commas in particular, or even semi-colons, where they are appropriate, indicate a slight pause. Try reading a page to yourself and reflect on where your natural language inflections happen. I have never checked the subjects, but possibly someone else may have submitted a writer's essay on American English punctuation.