by Momstheboss
Well, most of the comments are helpful, but considering the time span (8years), I no reason to believe you interested in comments ,let alone, finishing this story. To bad, it had potential.
XYZ
A little different. Thanks for the story. As to the complaints, warts and all, a good read.
Warren
good story line it just needs polished! a little more intrigue, dialog, and detail. plus there is nothing wrong with a sequel. There are lots of proof readers out there and I would suggest you read some of silk stockings submissions to get an idea of a good flow to a story. She is excellent and if you look I'm far from the only one that thinks that.
I hate gutless, anonymous, cheap shot artists!!! I gave him Five Stars out of spite, if nothing else.
This piece has the makings of a decent story, but the poor writing style, the lack of flow and focus, the misspellings, wrong words and jumbled phrases seriously detract from the reading experience. As an aside to Anonymous, "...keep us 'writers' on our toes." is correct since the object pronoun "us" is the object of the verb "keep".
Good luck.
Not us" writers" but "we writers".You however have not yet learned how to write good english.Please go and do some studying.
I like stories about mature men and women having taboo sex and getting enjoyment from it, and letting their sex drive get the better of them.
Too bad he couldn't find a way to visit his sister in law in Vermont without his wife coming along.
Thanks for the read.
" like their mother, co by her as a uld discard their husbands"
WTF??
You seriously need a good editor or just quit writing.
What the heck is that supposed to mean??
It could be that SIL Retires and moves Closer to have and to Hold whenever Possible.
I may have liked this story if it had better grammar, better flow etc. Concept is okay but it really needs to be read by someone else before submitting. What does this mean: "co by her as a uld discard..."
It is worth the time to ask someone else to read your stories before you post them.
You really should at least run a spell checker on your texts before publishing. The typos and grammer really distract from the story.