by chinookwind
This is a really good story and very arousing, but have you ever heard of a thesaurus? You use an astounding amount of descriptive phrasing over and over again. You might want to try changing things up. How many times do I need to read 'manhood' or 'jettisoned' or 'engorged' really? Depsite all that, great story you have here. I wouldn't mind reading more about these two.