All Comments on 'New Directions Ch. 01'

Beautifully written.

Clearly you are a talented writer with a gift for fine eroticism. A very gentle critique of mine would be perhaps overuse of the phrase "flip-flop".

But I will read and enjoy anything you write.

Thanks.

Sorry, you're right - I used flip-flop a lot. I guess I heard all these political candidates flip flopping around and got carried away! Happy Day.

I think that part of my enjoymnet of this story is not only the explicit descruption if the kove making but also the depth of the character development,

The characters in the story come alive in the description of their feelings. words that they speak and the realism of with which they seem to become involved in the events of the story

At one point he is Tom, at another point Rob. Check the names all the way through.