All Comments on 'Nighttime Confessions - Concluded'

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AnonymousAnonymous11 days ago

So in this universe I guess there are no cops. You just submit to the character who demands something absurd of you without question. You want me to be your sex slave for the foreseeable future so that my husband doesn't find out a second time about what he already witnessed? OK. You want to bash my leg up at my place of employment and then tell me you are going to kill me and my family? OK serves me right. I mean why should a character take any rational actions?

AnonymousAnonymousabout 2 months ago

This was very well done. A very different story evolution from the standard. Parr one had a lot of flaws but you recovered nicely in part 2.

Sandman87Sandman877 months ago

I thought the story was interesting. I did have a problem with the lead pipe. They haven't made lead pipes for a 150 years.

AnonymousAnonymous7 months ago

I liked parts & disliked other parts. She's coming off an adulterous week, having fucked one guy. Her husband, the idiotic wimp he is - saw it & did nothing, not even take photos!! - gave her a 2nd chance. What happens? Her principle at her school gets forced copies of their encounter & threatens her- she gives him sex or he'll give the copies of the pics to her husband.

She's trying to save off a divorce, so instead of telling her husband what's going on, she simply submits. The ONE piece, outside of him telling her he knows about her betrayal, was in the principal's office where hubby not only put a pipe to his knee & threatened him, but got the pictures. But that doesn't excuse her screwing her boss.

That the author continued to make the husband into a wimp, even if less than one, I need to downgrade this story to 2 stars, the same as the horrible 1st. Don't know if this's the author's desire to wimp out husbands, but it surely feels that way. Last story I read from him/ her. Bob

mndhanson017mndhanson0177 months ago

Marge was an idiot, literally, Don confronted her already about Phil, although Don didn't know his name, he already knew. She should have just walked away and told Don about Frank having the pictures, she literally claimed her marriage was worth more than her career, she literally showed the opposite by suck Frank off. That was just dumb because Don could have done this revenge on Frank and thus force Frank out. Failure on Marge's part for not communicating.

Xzy89c1Xzy89c18 months ago

Really bad.

He knew that she would again stray, and this time he would catch her.

He already caught her. What the hell are you writing.

AnonymousAnonymous9 months ago

This version of the story and Marge was just terrible. Seriously bad. Dumps.gasoline on capecod's original.

AnonymousAnonymous9 months ago

Nonsense for so many different reasons.

But I asked myself...why would he want to be married to a person who once is caught and is guilty just tries to end her life? Instead of fixing the situation? She mentally unstable. And a move to Maine will fix her?

Just dumb.

IFAFILHGIFAFILHG9 months ago

Great story... I love BTB stories but sometimes it's great to see a happy ending.. loved it

AnonymousAnonymous9 months ago

Yep typical femdom agroprop, it's all his fault his fault she, cheated, his fault she allowed herself to be blackmailed rather than take responsibility for her actions and face any consequences, and it was his fault she followed the self absorbed victims route and attempted self deletion, in the end He was one lucky bastered that she took him back in the end. .... wait did she learn anything did we? Her I don't think so, us sure we learned she's a cheater, we learned she's willing to whore herself out rather than take responsibility, then once facing irrefutable video proof of her debauchery seeing only one way to skirt taking blame--- become the victim.

AnonymousAnonymous10 months ago

This was a terrible variant on so many levels. Won't rehash what has been covered in comments below. But yeah the weakest blackmail just about ever.

oldtwitoldtwit12 months ago

Not bad but nothing special,

AnonymousAnonymousabout 1 year ago

What bothers me about this type of variant is how unrealistic it is to just walk away then look for more proof. In any. "Irreconcilable differences" all he needs is the proof he is witnessing. After that take care of the bank/credit, etc, move out and let the attorneys handle it.

If wants to cuck it...his problem. Wants to work it out? That usually works..maybe 10% of the time. Stay for the kids? They are hyperintuitive and will know things are not right and they'll be damaged even more. Growing up in a house with parents that don't love each other is not healthy.

30-40 years old and can't start over? BS.

Ger grief counseling, hit the gym 6 days a week, get involved in an activity; biking, fishing, shooting, photography, hiking, cooking, dancing...there is a lot. Lots of single groups do a lot of these things.

The kids? Money? Work it out. Sell the house then take his profits and pay her the child support for several years. She withholds the kids? Law suit...remember she has to pay for her attorney. Can she take the hit? Key thing be proactive and stay on the offense.

Anyway, just a thought.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 1 year ago

This was a terrible variant. What the heck? In the prior chapter by this author, Don watches the tryst with Phil and Marge and does nothing. He doesn't disrupt it, he doesn't take photos, and he just walks away after watching it for some time. Huh? But wait because dumbass doesn't have a smartphone or doesn't run out to her a camera and get back (of in ancient times), he has no evidence, so now he needs to get some. And again why he doesn't intervene by banging on the window and yelling (they would have heard the noise) or find her immediately right afterwards, makes no sense. As soon as Phil starts to go down on her, erupt and yell and make a scene, after you take photos. Freaking retarded. Then his big plan is to move out, take the new job, but forgets about the kids and has to move back in because he has no evidence. Unlike the original, there is no critical phone call with his wife the next day, and all we have is her word that she did nothing. In the original his phone call and his discomfort and bit of anguish cause her to reassess greatly and she stops fornicating. This time it is just her word. Ok then when get to Frank Morello. Weakest blackmail in a LW story. Frank doesn't know this, but Don already watched her fuck Phil and have massive orgasms on her tongue. And Marge knows that Don saw her. Yes he is looking for more evidence of continued cheating, but those photos are clearly from the conference with theb execrable shitbag Phil who took secret photos (is that in the charter of the swingers club?). So the photos would have zero impact on their marital status. Zero. Ok her job? Sure she woukd get fired. But wait, in less than six months her husband is moving to Maine with kids in an ultimatum and she already decided to leave her job at that time to be with her family, provided Don still wants her. Ok so job is not a big deal. She has to start over anyways in a few months. What about her reputation? Ok is that ever a reason for subjecting oneself to a blackmail sex scheme by a predator especially one talking about repeated, daily rapes? Umm no. Reputation be damned. She is not some elite athlete or performer or rich businessman. She is a PE teacher. Give it a rest. The blackmail was beyond useless. Frank didn't know it. Maybe she stalls for time with a blowjob (hoping it isn't recorded) to buy time to think it over. While still violated and depressed, she should come to this rational assessed that Frank can go fuck himself. And tell her husband, blowjob or no blowjob. Does she do anything of that? Nope she is a deer in a headlight victim being raped. Don sees the tapes and leaves her and moves out. She attempts suicide and he serendipitously saves her life. And then she discloses her blackmail rapes. Fingers Frank and hubby goes for the photos. Getting violent but just really scaring Frank, forcing him to cough up the kompramat and scaring him to resign. YAY! Btw he should visit Phil also. He is slime and has copies assuredly also. Heck also blow up Phil's marriage. Won't take much. Meanwhile guess what? She quits her job soon after release from hospital anyways. How is her reputation now? Do you think she made the right choice tonfucj Frank in their home. Who cares about the photos. Her husband got a big raise. They are moving to Maine and she has to restart anyways. So only bad decisions by Don and Marge throughout this variant. And also his two perceived indiscretions and her deep, gnawing, long lasting suspicions do not factor into these two alternate chapters at all. What a deviation from the original. Bleecch. Author's worst works. Again takena photo and make a scene banging hard on the glass. Hell get a rock and break the glass. That will get their attention. Also there is no discussion of what he saw. His insecurities as a man seeing his wife respond far more than ever with him. Does he learn to eat pussy? Does he try to get better in bed in say an epilogue? How does she feel about what her husband saw? What does great sex without emotional attachment mean. Is her semi frigidity in her head? Does it need to be oral sex to fulfill her? Is her semi frigidity now unlocked and she can have strong orgasms with foreplay and great oral? Counseling to address these issues. Nah just they go to Maine. All is forgiven.

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

Mostly true to the original.

Would have been a five but for the stupid black mail stuff.

Why would the woman who despised him yield to his treat to tell her husband they had already worked out.

If the author had to add that stupide scene, the wife would have laughed in his face and said here is the the money for the postage for you to send it special delivery.

Writers, writers, don't try too hard, don't try to get too cute.

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

These two stories were much worse than the original two of the original author Capecodmercury. The first had potential as he saw her with Phil. But this conclusion chapter was one of this author's worst. Seriously wa this just an experiment in blackmail rape? Thr husband has already told her he knows about Phil and watched her. She knows that he saw her. He only has her word that it was one time. None before and not the next two nights. He moved out then back in. He isn't going with her reconciliation attempts. She doesn't know he is just waiting for more evidence (btw why didn't he take any photos, video of her time with Phil, what no cell phones?). Btw evidence which will not do shit about custody in a trial. Certainly not to take the kids to Maine. No way. But with all of this, she submits to blackmail with Frank (how did he get the photos btw?, magic or is Phil a sleaze)? Why? Because of ger reputation with the school board and her parents? For the latter who cares. Her husband already knows and her marriage is on a knifes edge. Her husband is humiliated and saw her intense orgasms with Phil the experienced stud. His ego is shattered. She must have realized that he saw her in wild wanton monkey sex. Her job? Who cares. She says in six months she will leave for Maine a anyways with hubby (if they have a marriage). Also Frank is married. She can threaten him too. Call his wife and tell her that he is threatening her with blackmail sex. What happens when the photos come out? It gets investigated. They might or might not get back to Frank. But does he want to risk that? Also his wife will watch him like a hawk. Maybe she does the blowjob because she has no out, right away. Even that seems dumb. The only real leverage is the threats that her husband found about photos of a sexual tryst he ALREADY witnessed. She can counter threaten Frank, that if he exposes her, she will go to the cops, file charges, Phil will be outed and since he probably gave Frank rhe photo, then Frank will be a suspect. That would cost him at least a suspension, probably his job. Then it gets worse, she gets forced at home after calling in sick. Hubby looks at rhe video but doesn't listen to thr audio? Til later? And how does he get away with assaulting Frank? Why because he got the photos? And has an alibi? The cops will investigate. Because Frank is scared? His knee got shattered. I don't see him just resigning. Hubby's violent revenge is not well thought out. And then because she attempted suicide, somehow he decakres his love for her and everything will be ok? It isn't that simple. She cheated on him. He witnessed her being peeled of the ceiling. He was convinced she had other affairs and would cheat again. She got caught up in blackmail by Frank the rapist, possibly aided by Phil. And then she commits suicide. Maybe this is somehow all forgivable and maybe, just maybe somehow they reconcile. I get it she was blackmailed (though she should have stalled for time or told him to fuck off, that her husbadn already has photos (lie a little) and she is going to the cops since his primary leverage is fucking moot) and raped and attempted suicide, that has to factor into possible reconciliation. But the last page is way to easy and unrealistic. She resigns in threw weeks and they are off to Maine. Wouldn't psychiatrists demand visits for like a year or two? The original duo of stories are much better. And besides this was meant to be a continuation of the original l, during which we know of st least two infidelities by hubby as viewed through her eyes. What about all that? Her husband is Old Testament. Sure why saw her fuck and btw did NOT take photos OR confront! What advantage did he gain? He just moved back in (laughable) to get more evidence. What a maroon. This author has done much better and this was a failed continuation. And finally again she had ALL the reasons to call a bluff on Frank's blackmail threat. And she could have told him why to his face, how her husband already saw her, and if she loses her job, so with Phil (and a probable divorce), she will talk to Franks's wife, and if she loses her job she will pull Frank down with her. Heck just spit in a cup after the blowjob and get DNA tested and show results and sample goop to his wife. And oh yeah, go to the police!

Norseman123Norseman123over 1 year ago

I'm a sucker for a happy ending

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

Pathetic! unrealistic.Another cheat, blackmail, not her fault and a moron husband who finds reasons to accept it story..Way to many holes for not going along with the blackmail.This is a substandard story by you..I repeat a serious suggestion for better stories..Drunk,alcohol,drugs and blackmail do not happen if a person does not put themselves into that position in the first place so are not a get a free pass on infidelity for reconciliation.Very tiring of reading it..

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

ZEROZEROZEROZEROZERO... JUST PATHETIC.

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

OMG, really? Why do all idiots cheat instead of calling the blackmailers bluff? She was going to move to Maine anyway! Why would she care if he released the photo? Just not logical for her to cheat again or for the husband to keep her.

DreddrasDreddrasover 1 year ago

I enjoyed a lot of this, but don't understand how the wife was susceptible to blackmail with pictures of her tryst when her husband had already seen it happen live. Why not just immediately go tell him her boss was blackmailing her?

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 2 years ago

There is NO basis for reconciliation. She cheated and didn't come clean - lied. Take revenge on the bastards, but their actions do not excuse hers. The "for the children" trope is bullshit. It's the cliched way of making cucks out of husbands. The marriage will never be right, and the children will know it.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 2 years ago

Just another story about a pathetic cuck finding an excuse to keep a slut.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 2 years ago

After reading the original author's full story, this made me want to puke. Thoughtless drivel!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 2 years ago

Good story - the criticism is vicious! What’s with these people? Do you need to attack any writer who doesn’t follow your plot lines? Try writing a story and getting it published by Literotica. It ain’t easy

Leroy371Leroy371about 2 years ago

Some readers put it out, the blackmailing is bullshit. Marge is not dumb, a teacher as well. She had to deal at her work with many things and also to think quick. You need something for a nice end of the story, but this way it is crap.

One thing is also dumb. At the assault from Frank Marge had to resist more and tell him not to rape her. That´s what it was, rape. She know she would have to fold, but her will to save her marrige had to be seen.

And that Don not listen to the conversation is one thing, but you tell it like there was no sound at all.

So in my opinion you spoiled a good story.

ImNotanAnonImNotanAnonabout 2 years ago

Normally I'm not a fan of RAACs, but in this case, I'm good with it.

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

I liked it. Violence against over entitled buttheads (especially jocks) well deserved! Not necessarily realistic but great for a story.

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

Wow! Finally, the author actually wrote a complete ending to a story! 5 stars!

Thank you!

As far as the RAAC naysayers go, forget them. Sometimes, reconciliation is the correct path, sometimes BTB. Think Frank deserved more but like the outcome (except, he should have received several kicks to the Balls while passed out)

Well done.

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

Wait! If her husband already knew of her cheating,if he had seen her do it personnally, why did she have to submit to hr Principal. Stopped reading there. No sense.

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

I'm not into the violence in any way. He put himself and his family at risk by going that way.

I would have explained about the cameras and the possibility of charges of extortion and rape and how I am sure that his own family and his employers wouldn't be singing praises for him after everything came out and they, too, would be hit with a lawsuit.

Of course, that would have been a very boring story.

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

Just another pathetic RAAC story.

mischief_makermischief_makerover 2 years ago

I’m so glad this clown stopped vomiting his cheater apologist drivel. Pathetic.

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

Forgibeness is it's own reward but it helps when you can beat the shit out of a blackmailing sleaze.

LA

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 3 years ago

No.

LWlurker

whateverittakeswhateverittakesalmost 3 years ago

Granted, he's bent out of shape at his wife's cheating but how does a father forget about his kids? Terrible conclusion to a bad story.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 3 years ago

your stories are all the same nothing but cuck bullshit.................

AnonymousAnonymousabout 3 years ago

Great ending

AnonymousAnonymousover 3 years ago
NOPE!

All that time and effort and all you produced was another pathetic RAAC story.

MarkT63MarkT63over 3 years ago

Walk away after you find her in the tub!!! Come home way later with the kids only to find her cheating body!! Great.

AnonymousAnonymousover 3 years ago

“She recognized that over the past few years she had put her career ahead of him and relegated him to a secondary role in her life.” Lmao, the oh so competitive career field of PE teaching! I can see how consuming that would be.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 4 years ago
Not for me

So he was ok with why she was being blackmailed? Next time she cheats and he catches her, she will just threaten to commit suicide to stop him from leaving. Didnt like this at all...

jsch1947jsch1947almost 4 years ago
Terrible

You took a story that was "open ended"..

You didn't write a continuation. You tried a rewrite.

It sucks.

The original was 5x as polished.

Mrhappy4aaMrhappy4aaabout 4 years ago
She still cheated...

All of this stuff that has happened, the blackmail, the lies, and the suicide attempt is because she cheated at the conference, period. Her fault for not being a living wife. Ok, so he can look past all that and save their marriage... so is he going to spy on her when they move to make sure she won't cheat agaih? Or is he going to believe a cheater.... 4 stars, but is a nice story, but needs a continuing chapter.

jimjam69jimjam69about 4 years ago
Okay

Average cheat/revenge story, with a big flaw. If he knew and saw what Marge had done cheating, told her about it, why would she now care someone had photos? Makes no sense at all.

Just_WordsJust_Wordsabout 4 years ago
Two things seemed out of sorts.

First, she went from cheat to regret awfully fast. She demeaned him for several years, but one cheat, she gets caught, and then she's going to be the best wife ever?

Second, he knew about the affair. Why give in to blackmail when she could just tell her husband that she was being blackmailed?

BoomerbillBoomerbillover 4 years ago
Bunkum!

Sorry, pure bunkum!

Huedogg2Huedogg2over 4 years ago
another attempt at writing from a males POV

cuckolds aren't men, there is no excuse for cheating. He already knew she cheated, so why give into blackmail? He was as she thought he was, a spineless cuckold.

jtwheelsjtwheelsover 4 years ago
Anon 5/29 said it my complaint

He knows

And even if he didn't giving in to blackmail is never going to free you

Just making it worse

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 5 years ago
Give me a break. Total bullshit

"She knew, without any doubt, that she loved Don with every fibre of her being. That emotion may have moved to the back of her mind over the past years,"

Why do people write shit like this? Seriously, she loved him with EVERY FIBER OF HER BEING? How can you love your spouse with every fiber of your being and then disrespect him/her, your kids, your family? Can't happen. Total Bullshit

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 5 years ago
it....works...sorta

but it's pretty fucking stupid.

she was blackmailed....with the affair that the husband ALREADY knew about.

this was dumb. you could argue that the wife value her public image too much. but you already wrote her as being supremely remorseful and willing to quit her job to move with him elsewhere. she even slit her wrists in shame. so you wrote her badly.

unless the blackmail was about another affair.....

the problem with another affair is it makes her seem less remorseful.

you really wrote yourself into a pickle...

nothing really works the way you wrote it.

AH, I got it! The jock drugs her, takes pics of that, and uses THAT to blackmail her. THAT would work, not photos of the affair the hubby already knows about....silly.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 5 years ago
The difference

Between adults and children is realizing when it's time to move on.

If you want to trust someone they need to be trustworthy. If they are not they can't be trusted. that is all.

dark2donut2dark2donut2over 5 years ago
Not too bad

Works for me but ... Blue88 has his characters all females. His male and female characters are all females. His male characters always cray, always throw up, always wimp out.

Some stuff here is outright stupid like

1. he did not think how the divorce could affect children ... REALLY?

2. Instead of stopping copulation between wife and Phil whatever he runs away and flies back home ... Really?

Another thing that is a problem. If she "loves Don with every fiber of her being" then how to explain the previous chapter where she shows her repeated disdain for him, and they supposedly do not have sex for extended period of time? This is a typical turnaround mistake of lousy writers - a character behaves one way and then another way, whichever way the writer wants but without any consistency.

Make no mistake, Blue88 is not a good writer but he does have a little knack for suspense and with some training perhaps he can write a bit better. This is not too bad.

kurmuginkurmuginover 5 years ago
So much anger..

It is astounding the amount of intense anger the anonymous critics throw at so many of the authors in the LW section. Man, they have some very serious anger management problems. Of course, LW does give them a venue in which to vent their vitriolic angst.

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
Another cuck writer out of my list

I think this is the fourth story of yours I read. All of them have the unmistable stink of a cuckold writer. Unlike Matt Moreau who embraces his wimpiness, you try to make your characters look like males but in the end you cut their balls and turn them into pathetic replicas of men. I'll never read a story of yours.

It's really sad there are so little good writers left here.

Just_WordsJust_Wordsover 5 years ago
The difference between adults and children...

...is their willingness to fix what they brake. She won't win wife of the year, but she was trying to fix what she broke. Too bad it took a suicide attempt to get him to man up. Good story.

26thNC26thNCover 5 years ago
Can't save her

She is a whore already. What's to save. Leave her behind.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 6 years ago
Anon 6/28 is an asshole

If you don't have the balls to get a FREE account? You have zero room to talk. Being an adult means you own the stuff you do- good or bad. You hide behind a keyboard and talk smack? Especially about some minor age issues?

Kiss my July 4th sweaty ass and ball crack

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 6 years ago
Brad was 14

If you check the original story, Marge had just cheated and stated Brad was 14 YO and Sarah was 12 YO. If you want to write a sequel get the facts right. One Story I read, a 10 YO son was omitted.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 6 years ago
You Screwed Up!

Did you forget that Brad, the son, was off to college and that Sarah, the daughter was the only child home and old enough to decide who she wanted to be with incase of divorce? I think you did forget.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
What a load of shit!

The pictures meant nothing to Don. He already knew his wife had cheated. So the pictures should not have meant anything to Marg! So why did Marg give Frank a blowjob!

tennesseeredtennesseeredabout 6 years ago
Pretty decent story

Amazing how our baseline assumptions about technology and culture have changed in the 13 years since this story was posted. Negatives? Not anymore! Text messages? Ubiquitous surveillance? Phony disguises? GPS tracking? Even bosses blackmailing their employees is a non-starter anymore.

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
unfinished

As others have stated phil skates in all renditions

Hate when author has ''hero'' threaten someone with ''oneday i will kill you'' then ends story

You have done this in two stories

Where is finishthedamnstory

etchiboyetchiboyover 6 years ago
Agree... What about Phil Grant???

Phil still probably had negatives or digital files. And how the hell did Frank get the photos? From Phil. Duh. So, for a full resolution to this story Don is going to have to visit Phil and get all copies of photos. And I think Phil would also get a busted knee, if not worse, like the proverbial kick to the balls. He was after all the instigator of this all.

Only problem is I don’t know where Phil lives. Being a conference it could be several states away. Ah well... a nice Friday night drive to what ever state, a couple of nights at a KOA (don’t want obvious paper trail), find Phil, and take him out. And find out why Phil is giving out the photos anyway (though I think Frank should have been asked this question while Don had him on the floor).

desertdog43desertdog43over 6 years ago
OOPS!!

She couldn't be blackmailed, husband already knew. A little "talk" with old Frankie and off to Maine, take yer sno shoes...T

cockcriticcockcriticalmost 7 years ago
Revenge

Don could have found out where Morello got his new job probably teaching and sent the video of how his wife was treated and blackmailed by him, to his new management with a covering note pointing out that is how he treats his fellow workers.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 7 years ago
but what about phil

Seems phil deserved tuning up also.

I recall other variations of this story and even in those phil skates away

AnonymousAnonymousabout 7 years ago

reconciling after a suicide attempt is a real thing.

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
Crap...

the whore should have died... her suicide attempt doesnt change that she is in fact a cheap slut and totally untrustworthy...

silentsoundsilentsoundover 7 years ago
Ok. 4*

But you still lack exploration and satisfying resolution.

This one was closer though.

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
Karen E And SBrooks Said It Already

Don already had seen what went on at the conference. He couldn't threaten Marge with showing pictures to Don. And Marge knew she and her family would soon be moving to Maine. So Frank's threats carried no power whatsoever. Bad oversight by the writer. But I do commend the writer for having Don beat the crap out of Frank and threaten to gut him like a fish. Damned if that doesn't sound like what I, myself, would do.

Xzy89cXzy89cover 7 years ago
Awful

Forgot about the kids is glaring.

DrSemblanceDrSemblanceover 7 years ago

I came way too late to add any original thoughts to the comments, and I don't want to copy/paste a whole comment so..

What Cueball said

Really, he hit on the points perfectly.. multiple personalities, ridiculous "blackmail", father forgot that he had kids

RhomanovRhomanovabout 8 years ago
***

Came back for a reread... Yup. Busted plot.

sbrooks103sbrooks103over 8 years ago
Blackmail?

As KarenE said, how can Frank blackmail her with pictures of what her husband had already seen? And since she's leaving town she has no concerns on that score, either.

tazz317tazz317almost 9 years ago
CHEATING TURNS TO BLACKMAIL TURNS TO

marriage woes then into resurgence. TK U MLJ LV NV

Tw0Cr0wsTw0Cr0wsalmost 9 years ago
it isn't the cheating

The snide remarks, the slights, the insults and disdain that show a total lack of respect are proof of a love that is already gone.

So really what need did he have to "prove" her infidelity?

Without trust and love what marriage exists except as a legal fiction?

Pappy7Pappy7almost 9 years ago
Does anyone know if this writer is still active or if he is even still alive?

I have wondered that for a while now. He writes good but has a tendency to make his male leads to be wimps and weak men where their wives are concerned. Strong men of moral character do not just give in and forgive disrespect and cheating. Doesn't happen in the world. I have noticed that the older some of these authors get the more they try to keep the families together. I can get behind that for sure, but these forced reconciliations are hard to stomach.

EgoTrixiEgoTrixialmost 9 years ago
You try but you cannot do it, obviously...

...please stop writing stories like this one. Obviously you have a strong affinity to stories where a husband regularly is subdued, being with very little pride and self-esteem. Just not possible that a husband, having caught his wife serveral times inflagrante, still acts inconclusive as far as a separation is concerned. Honest to god: I get mad reading about those prideless wimpy caricatures. Sorry. Leave these stories to those that enjoy writing them.

SuddenThunderSuddenThunderabout 9 years ago
My bad, I forgot the this author's RAAC propensity and wasted my time.

Instead of threatening Frank, he should have gone ahead and gelded himself. Marge will do it again. For me it was a waste of time

chilleywilleychilleywilleyabout 9 years ago
Well written with some Plot issues

You were doing OK until Don got home and wanted 'proof' of her cheating. That was nuts, and unlikely to do him any good anyway. It would have been better to simply not trust her and go on with the story. Sometimes less is more.

Otherwise well written, good dialog and OK characters. You left unstated her long years of disinterest in her husband, I would have been good to have an erotic section of the hospitality fucking from her point of view too.

Oh well, the story is long written, with many more after it, so it was well above average.

Chilley

AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
Another stupid story

This cuckold turn this story into another bitch gets away with it again... These people that like this story and its type... Are either bitches or guys who like sucking other guys cum... She did the right thing.. should not have stopped her

AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
duhhhh, the husband already knew

dumb plot, dumb, dumb, dumb

AmbivalenceAmbivalenceabout 9 years ago
You know... these two stories..

were neither a continuation nor a conclusion.

They were completely different stories. Though names were the same and the initial premise was similar, it read like a version of "Invasion of The Body Snatchers"...

If you're going to "continue" a story, FILL in the characters, don't REWRITE them.

KarenEKarenEover 9 years ago
Blackmail?

How could Frank blackmail her?

Don had already SEEN her with Phil, how much worse could seeing the pictures be?

And as far as her job and the community goes, she's already promised to quit her job and move to Maine with Don, so there's minimal loss there.

Tw0Cr0wsTw0Cr0wsalmost 10 years ago
always RAAC from this writer

Why would he want her?

"years of belittlement and indifference and then"..."blatant adultery"

Is he a masochist?

Love can die, he was the only one in the marriage for years.

She didn't care for or about him, after all he wasn't a team sport jock.

Too much damage has already been done.

Men need physical intimacy and affection, she gave him nothing.

The opposite of love is not hate, it is indifference, so clearly she did not love him.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 10 years ago
Wasted

Time

sdc92078sdc92078about 10 years ago
Wasted opportunity

All he had to do was let her bleed out.

betrayedbylovebetrayedbyloveover 10 years ago
Damn

He got The asshole Frank but how about the prick who took the pictures? Phil deserved a beating also. Like the original, just another of the wrong possible endings. What the fuck.

sugnasugnaover 10 years ago
Stupid

#1 who needs a wife that demeans and disparages you?

#2 who needs a wife that cheats on you?

#3 The kids were old enough that given his wife's behavior, he could have gotten custody

#4 If her boss blackmailed her for sex on school grounds, he is going to jail, and she is getting a big payout from him and the school district! Why not just get a good lawyer and not bother dealing with him and assaulting him. The money is where it's at baby!

#5 So she tried to kill herself, you come home and she is bleeding out in the tub. No regard for her children. She is all about HER. You turn around and quietly leave the house and come back in a few hours, you report it, you bury her, shed a few crocodile tears and then you and the kids move to Maine! (You still hire a lawyer and sue the shit out of everyone involve including her lover! Make them all suffer, drag them all through the local papers while you and your kids are safely in remote Maine!!! Yahoo it smells like a good solution to a shitty marriage and a shittier wife~!

Drbeamer3333Drbeamer3333over 10 years ago
Enjoyed it

However, you presented the wife in much the same way the original story had - which contradicts your depiction of her in your opening chapter.

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
Another LOSER story

Enough said!!

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
If she had not fucked someone else

There wouldn't be a story and it wouldn't belong in Loving Wives - fitting that a moron like cansellyou would leave such an idiotic comment since his "stories" don't have plot, tension, etc.

cantbuymycantbuymyover 10 years ago

If she had not fucked someone else to begin with there would not have been any blackmail,

sugnasugnaover 10 years ago
Loser

He was still married to a disrespectful bitch! If she had loved him she would not have treated him like shit for years and fucked another guy. This story is WEAK.

illjoyilljoyalmost 11 years ago
Sainthood

Saint Don, the forgiving wimp

monkcalmmonkcalmalmost 11 years ago
This is your idea of a loving wife?

You have all your supporters good for you yeah!, people who dont have morals support your characters mistakes and their responses or lack there of, oh yes it is a great tale of humanity, and these are the characters the cheaters love, aww he should forgive her, she just made a mistake, when the shit hit's the fan do you want any man or woman who supported her.. as just making a mistake watching your back? or your kids back?. Those are cut and run people the ones that get into the life boat and paddle away by them selves, cheaters dont like to be judged, or seen, and they dont like other cheaters pointed out as bed even in a story. The other thing is the forced reconciliation? meek is not weak: patient under suffering but still can say no to her because she is lies and evil.

JounarJounaralmost 11 years ago
1* god awful rubbish

Nothing in this story makes any sense.

Hubby wants to catch wife cheating again and is pissed off due to how long its taken to get the proof needed so he can get the kids. Yet when she not only cheats but tries to kill herself, he suddenly wants her back? Even if he he didn't want her to die, he still had more than enough proof to get the kids at that point so why keep a two time cheating slut?

And a wife who is on a second chance, risks losing her family to protect a job she is about to quit not only to keep her husband but a husband that already knows what she's being blackmailed about ? So she's more concerned about what people she's never going to see again think instead of having a family?

Fucking hell Blue88, did you even read what you wrote before posting it?

OneShotOneOneShotOnealmost 11 years ago
Your work is awful

Just awful nonsensical crap.

HardFeltHardFeltalmost 11 years ago
On bended knee......

Or broken knee. That's all huh? What was the lead pipe for? Traumatized by her actions?

Well duh! Her job was so important to her that she quit? I guess I need some help here ...

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