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This is terrible. Have you ever read anything? Do you understand plot and dialog? Where are you going with this? Why post it now? Work hard to make it literate.

The author jumps too quickly from one point to another. He's meeting Tina on the sly and the next day his wife wins a trip to Barcelona for which they depart the very next day. There is no build up, no anticipation in this story. Why not just simply say 'They bumped into one another and jumped in the back seat of his car in the underground garage. Then they met each day there after day and simply fucked one another brains out' and et it over with.