All Comments on 'Nuclear Response'

Just too stupid, started off good but then went to the ridiculous ⭐️

Over the top and as others have said, with her journal he should have gone to the federal authorities who could have brought the whole company down.

Although she came to like it she had been set up then blackmailed. I think she should have lived and given a new identity. I am not suggesting he should have taken her back but she was a victim and didn't need to die.

I would have sent a copy of the the journal to every federal agency and to every newspaper and tv station in the coutnry and state with a statement of the thread to him and the daughter.

He is a mindless wimp. ...

Her wife was a victim....

He killed his wife for his own incapability and benefits

He can shift his family somewhere else and use wife's journal and CDs for legal action to destroy the Thompson Inc sex racket

Big guy like butcher got so many people on his clutch. This fictional revenge maybe had a lot of plot holes but best revenge so far. Too bad we didn't see butcher suffer more

Wow my brain was slow to pick up on the Manny / best friend until i read the final line.

Again. Maybe he should have just burned them legally, but as Lue always n says ,"where's the fun in that?"

This has to be the most stupid story I've e er read. No woman in her right mind would buy into tbis blackmail scheme. Any woman with even half sense would discuss this with her husvand, especially after the first day and discovering her new role. This is so silly its not worth reading and actually makes no sense. A sensible person that is asked to perform such a terrible task would immediately go to the police. The writer of this story went out of tbe realm of reality to write thissorry crap. No reading his crap anymore.

Pretty inane plot. Maybe it was another case of "The Martian Slut Ray". Nothing else would make this drivel half-way believable.

Actually a very ordinary story, l give it 3/5 reluctantly

He did hardly anything to revenge anyone in the end. He just let events flow and waited for a karmic result that had to follow.

It got boring.

Better luck next time

Now I am become death, the destroyer of worlds. J. Robert Oppenheimer

that is the biggest case of plaigarism i have seen. That quote was not Oppenhiemers it was taken by Op from the 'bagwad gita' a hindu mythological epic... So dear RADK please correct your quote..else accept that you area plaigarist

What an utterly stupid poorly written waste of space. Why not have his wife work for a company that killed puppies, tortured kittens and did unspeakable things to everyone else for fun and games? I mean that is hugely more plausible than this complete disaster. There is a sub-genre on here of this sort of BS. Warn people in advance please: pt skulls and crossbones and haz mat signs at the beginning, "WARNING: You will lose precious minutes of your life on this porrly written trash. Proceed at your peril!"

Death was too quick for the butcher, he should have died suffering in prison.

0 stars - waste of time and no comment could make it any difference.

Once you include violence of any type in your story, I will automatically award you zero.

Weak sauce, imo.

I liked it but I'm a realist and don't live in a fantasy world like nixrox "All's fair in love and war ! "

Great Example of Choices and Consequences.

It showed perfectly that nobody is right.

The Protagonist could've handled it better.

But we all do mistakes.

Nonetheless all I want to say.... Don't put your Blinders on... Trust but Verify.

Blindingly trusting someone always reward in disaster.

Oppenheimer was quoting Vishnu...

Well as soon as the HIV story came up I knew her husband had infected her with someones help but it didn’t exact any revenge on his wife her boss killed her an then he was shot pretty crap revenge on the 2 people who hurt him the most imo

What a great story. 5 stars.

he got his revenge but in a way its disappointing as the people he was angry at didnt know he was their downfall.

Bah I wish the group who beat him and humiliated him had some realization he was the architech of their demise. Great revenge mechanics but revenge is all about those you take revenge on knowing it was a specific set of events that triggered it all.

3. He got his revenge but in a unsatisfying way. Not saying he needed to go Rambo on them but it would have been nice for them to know he was responsible. He threatened them, told them to look over their shoulders and just killed them by STD given to his wife who was a victim same as he was and angry wife of the main guy. Not the greatest of revenge. Also not all that satisfying on the erotic side, all the sex was between the blackmailed wife and terrible people. Not bad but not great either.

Methinks the writer has no clue just what 'nuclear' means.......

really? good plot for 1 page then it gets ridiculous.

Randy convinenced Manny to fuck Jenni. How he did it we don't know, but Randy faked the call from Jenni's boss, which sends her to Manny, she fucks him and becomes the Nuc Randy needed to get them all permanently. So Randy is probably an accessory to Manny's crime, but Manny dies before anyone figures it out; Jenni is dead, so Randy is clear of being accused of any wrong doing and the bomb does her job, and there is total devistation. Nasty, but well done. Good job. Keep writing.

XYZ

If only more of the assholes had been infected it would be a more enjoyable WMD revenge, while I may feel sorry for the other spouses, etc... all those in the company, the scumbag managers henchmen (the sheriff, deputies and business associates) all deserved it, NO MERCY at all.

"April 2, 2009 (Thursday)"

The journal was handed over to Detective Archer. How did the MC get the names out of it for his lawyer if he no longer had the journal?

Yes. No divorce, no bullshit. Absolutely epic!

Absurd plot.

Re: BobbyBrandt

You have heard of technology like copy machines, scanners and cameras haven't you? They all existed when this story was written.

Don't know how "nuclear" this was. The fallout, on the other hand, was beyond apocalyptic, towards those involved. Was there collateral damage? Yeah, quite a bit. Was our main character's revenge perfect? Only to the extent that he was never caught, nor suspected of anything. Was the story plausible? Who knows? At the very least, his plan clearly got the job done. It's probably a great mercy that her boss murdered her, as opposed to her inevitable painful death from AIDS. That may seem like a rotten thing to say, but let's be real for a second. Randy and Jenni we're finished as a couple anyway. There's no way in hell, he was going to take her STD ridden ass back into his life as anything beyond being the mother of their child. I sure wouldn't

Would have had more of an impact if it had been set 20-30 years ago. Wasn't a fan that the wife and the boss got murdered. It robs the husband of the satisfaction of destroying them. Though i suppose, in the wife's case, she was already dead inside.

should have put this in scifi no one in this story was a human from our earth. narrating in lists is just bad eh the whole thing was bad. yeah it was disgusting but even the disgusting part were bad. the fact that he gave innocent people HIV makes him worse than the boss at least it was just 3 ppl he was messing with. not to mention the fact that he didnt seem to give a shit about the innocent before or after. eh guess i already said these werent any kind of humans in the real world

Yes he was a wimp.... Sorry but anyone threatening my kids, I would either immediately get a gun or call the cops.

How was this a nuclear revenge? Most disappointed. Anyone threatened my daughter Forget the police, there would a dispensing of justice that would stagger the imagination.

This story was fucking so stupid on an EPIC scale it's no surprise he married a dumb ass whore for a wife because he was about as stupid as a box of rocks. And his revenge was so fucking stupid 🙄 like seriously author have you heard of using your imagination.

Just what she deserved

Jenni, the whore should have told Butcher to fuck off in the beginning. Her idiot husband should have armed himself, and after practicing to be a crack shot, killed them all. Now, he should marry his buddy's mother...

Tell me what woman / slut / whore likes fucking 20 men in a night? I keep asking the authors to write circumstances that could pressure otherwise NORMAL people to fail or withstand the circumstances to cheat or not cheat…..and to the degrees of NORMAL sexual activities…….no 12 orgasms, no 10 hour sex episodes……normal human activities. The drama IS the effect on the people……not gang bangs, 14 inch cocks, and 19 guys a night. Write real life things……much more interesting. R. H.

Disappointing.

jopstorm1945

Needs to be re written

This is what you call scorched earth. The plot line is obviously farfetched, but an interesting tale nonetheless. Can’t say I loved it, but I’m curiously drawn in. I had to give it 4⭐️ just because if that.

You are one fucked up dude. It’s so far out there you can’t even see it.

The MC not only wasn't very bright, but he was a wimp and his wife was an over the top whore and slut. He had an opportunity to deliver a nuclear response but wimped out, especially after being beaten up once (because he was a bit clueless)

Entire story screams I am a basement dwelling titty baby

Great burn all the bag guys story. You certainly triggered the wimps on here.

Guy got tired of being a cuck. Upstairs tittybabies like everyone to be cucks like them.

Just a bad story about a wimp that had a handy cap of stupidity...He just did and went about everything the wrong way without really thinking out any of his actions before trying to implement them. Plain bad story because no one can be as dumb as you presented him.... It's very hard to bare fools...2 stars..JZK...

Traveling 20 years in the military for inspections and contract performance and then 20 years in aerospace doing the same sort of thing causes the following comment. If my wife was going on a business trip and said she was going to be coming home late Sunday or early Monday I would have told her to not bother coming back. Not in forty years does one go out for less than a two week trip and is gone over the weekend.

His wife is in an impossible situation, blackmailed, and raped. Does he set out to help her? No, he only wants revenge He wanted it so badly that he murdered his wife, who was more a victim than he was. Your writing is spot on, but your story is cruel for no good reason. I wonder if you actually hate women.

Nuclear response indeed!

Butcher got off way to easily.

Rest of Thompson employees got off way too easily.

Jenni got fucked by everyone (literally) and deserved better.

MC achieved revenge but not sure he really got satisfaction. His lawyer also screwed him in the settlements.

mfj

FUCK that,she was a lying pig, husband was a pussy and the blackmail guy was a bully, I HATE BULLIES, I used to call mine DAD. I tagged him back, you can bet on that. lol

I didn't read any revenge caused by the husband. Didn't see his nuclear response. Her death, Butchers death, it all went down from there.

Silly premise. Nobody in their right minds would set up a female employee like than, and then create an illegal scheme with her in it. Anyone in a corporate culture knows this would stay secret for a nanosecond, or less. She could wait until she'd been sexually assaulted (induced via blackmail or threat is sexual assault) and then go to the police. Anyone who reads this will lose anywhere from two percent to five percent of their I.Q. It belongs in Sci-Fi/Fantasy. Or in the Microsoft Recycle Bin.

Yup.

Perfect way to end a conniving wife (she was only a victim the first time) and a bunch of scheming blackmailers.

How else could he have protected his daughter, the ONLY innocent person in this entire story?

You could gave gotten from beginning to end without that level of depravity by the wife,really? Weekly 20 person gangbangs? Everyone having Rhino schlongs? Really? Her boss being a James bond villain esque predator? Really? But I get that its artistic license, it just detracts from the plot. The one gaping hole that I spot (other than Jenni AYOOO) is that with all that whoring and sharing... How were they not getting her blood checked weekly? talk about Russian Roulet.

So, I could get believe her becoming the company whore, but you took it to cartoonish levels.

The sheer amount and volume are just so unbelievable that they destroy the immersion. Then you've got the husband acting all hard and suddenly he's as meek as a lamb. Don't get me wrong, I enjoyed his solution, but the fact that you never had him reveal that their suffering was his doing takes away a lot of the fun. It's all about the revelation that he turned the tables on them. Unfortunately, that never came in this story. It's one of the reasons so many stories in this category suck. The writers don't have a basic grasp of drama. It's all about getting from point A to point B in the shortest time possible with the writers in this section.

I agree with the anon from 13 days ago - There's no point in pulling a caper / reversal if at the end you don't explicitly make it either a) complicated enough to be enjoyable and b) reveal it to the readers. I mean, we all guess what happened - but a lot was left unsaid. Did he infect Jenni via Portus somehow indirectly and without her knowledge (murder) or was she an accomplice? How was it done? Was there anything else that was done?

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I'll give you a pass for the cartoonish villains and the bizzare setup and even Jenni's obvious insane behavior because it's a STORY, but I was hoping for a bit... more here? You just missed the mark. I wanted something either more clever, or more violent and outrageous and we wanted a front row seat. You know what I mean?

I don't know why writers post stories in this category--the comments are sooooo harsh. These are amateur writrrs doing this for free for gods sake! Suspend your disbelief and try to enjoy someone else's efforts!