All Comments on 'Nude in Public'

I'm not sure what happened, but this is a far cry from your previous works. Misspelled words, missing punctuation, improper tense usage, lack of proper demarcation between description and the spoken word. In short, you should sent it to your editor. What could've been a very interesting tale, was sidetracked by improper preparation.

Since I take off my clothes for a living, it is interesting to read about a woman who's reluictant to pose nude. The story works well on those terms.

However, as Anonymous has already pointed out, there are many, many issues with spelling, punctuation, tense, etc. Taking a little time to edit and repost it (or seeking a good editor) could improve it from a 2 to a 4 in my book.

I hope this is taken in the spirit in which it's offered. You're a good writer and it's a shame to see your work diminished by a lack of quick fixes.

I like idea of a NIP story from the viewpoint of the model. How about a prequel? I would love to hear about Jan's experience naked in the supermarket.

i liked the story very much. looking forward to reed more about her next day ;-)

I really liked the concept but the writing felt clunky and unnatural which was a shame. I've read most of your previous work and really liked it but I just couldn't get into this one because I kept being jolted out of the story by the flaws in the writing.

Please, please, please re-edit this. I know you can do better.

I'd like to read another adventure with this pair (any chance you can give your narrator a first name?), and was wondering whether (a) Mike might persuade Christine to join them in front of the camera on that occasion, and/or (b) he gets as turned on by these shoots as much as the young ladies, which offers another avenue for the storyline to take after work's over.<br>

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In the meantime, however, this instalment requires tweaking: aside from the occasional typo or spelling error, quite a few of the sentences run into each other, which can be a bit of a distraction when you're building up the atmosphere.

This story was up to your usual high standard, but, as others have commented, the errors in spelling (and use of American English) detracted from it.

Lady Grey is clearly sexual and appreciates the sensual side of life.

I was very pleased that she posted an excellent photo of herself. Very attractive.

Thank you, Lady Grey, for sharing your your perceptions and feelings with us.

I was especially pleased at the appreciative attitude of her characters. The gentle acceptance of the crew, and the observers, was enticing.

Sensual re nudity, exhibitionism, and the first lesbian scene left me happy. I liked relations w photographers, expect to find Sam and Mike getting it on, maybe w Jan...

May return soon, to see how story turns out. Do keep writing, sharing here, and telling us how to find your other work. I appreciate how your self-employment allows you freedom of lifestyle.

Still up there. Onto more Lady Grey.

Would love to be the photographer in this situation.

Excellent story. Being nude in a primarily clothed group of people is an arousing experience.

Fun story! You’ve captured the thrill and the nervousness that I felt when I started. Good job!