by BIG LIK
That was a bit morbid, the whole story was good until the end. Just the bloodshed wasn't what I expected. Didn't like the mix of crime and passion I guess.
BROTHER DON'T KILL THEMSELFS OVER WHORES.TAUGHT FROM CHILDHOOD NOT TO DO THAT.TOO MANY FISH IN THE SEA.
Who In the hells would kill themselves over some fat slob of a woman! Fortunately I don't really think fat women are attractive. Maybe he should have killed Ms. Piggy and eat her for supper!
what kind of punk would kill themself over a pig whore like that? He should have killed the whore, or her lover. If he was dead set on killing himself, he should have killed the lover as well, let the whore live with the knowledge that both men she "loved" were dead. Of course its obvious she didn't love hubby, and probably not lover either. I whores like that only love themselves.
its funny how all you guys hide, behind 'anonymous'
you are the 'PIG' for writing stuff like that, now go and play with yourself, because i answered you, 'SICK PIG'
I don't like the end, but this is a sad reality. Your writing is awesome though. I usuallly don't read interracial stories other than than BW/WM..but this one was good.
you tried to convince me that the JAMAICAN didn't smoke weed! are you outta your mind? that's some bullshit. obviously suyi is haitian. with a japanese name.
Your story was excellent but ended horribly. What was the point of that? Seems kinda clumsy and amateur writing to throw in a trumped up over the top ending. It's a real shame cause everything else was absolutely smoking.
What was he expecting after he had received her back? She had left him for the other...Who walks back is a crab...
He should have kicked her out the first time..
Besides, NO WOMAN is worth taking your life.......
Just 1*, because this was the worst end possible!!! He was fucking the lover's wife, he only had to show that to the cheaters!!!! But kill himself? How stupid is that?
Well there were different ways to handle the situation and Derek certainly used one. In his shoes I think the better way would be grabbing Julie and the kids and heading to a new life. But the ending rang true.
People should understand that grief can kill. Maybe you all called him wimp for killing himself but what happened when something you believed in shattered like a glass. I want to see the this sequel of these two cheaters suffering from what they did.
as much as this was an unexpected ending. it does actually have a ring of truth to it. not everyone can handle their emotions in this scenario.