All Comments on 'On the Bus'

So good to see your first story up on the boards, and such a hot one as well. Next time you catch a bus let me know where from ;)

you put it together well so I am not complaining. I would suggest that you try another that is just a little longer with a woman or man that can wait for the bedroom. Keep writing.

ENJOYED THIS A LOT. ALTHOUGH I LIKE THE SHORT STORIES BEST I WOULD PREFER JUST A BIT LONGER BUT GREAT FIRST EFFORT.

Hey Hun.........Clicked on your link and read this wonderful short, but to the point story.

If it is a quick fix that people are after to jack off to, then this won't fail to please........well it worked for me.

Great start to your Submissions, can't wait for the next one :)

(((hugssssssssss))) and kisses

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a "true life story" in Take a Break...poor vocabulary, awful dialogue and no real point to it. The sex was cliched and juvenile. Awful

I loved this story because it felt fresh and original. I find public transport sexy and this is the girl I want to meet on the train on the way home. Greast start, I hope to read some more some time x

I do not know where "Anonymous " find's Take a Break Issues with this kind of story but I hope he lets us all know. I loved this first short story more please.

I would like to know where anonymous get's his/her issues of Take a Break, as if they carry short stories like this I will buy them.

Great story a real fantasy come true more please.

Hey. I love this story, I keep coming back to read it. definitely do more chapters of it, maybe continue this on other modes of transport, its really great.

Thanks for getting me horny with this one Bookworm ;) x

The briefest story i have read on here,in fact.

To the point,like an urgent need to cum.

I encourage you to write more,preferably in the vein of someone getting suddenly and unexpectedly taken by a stranger.

I am moist thinking about it!