All Comments on 'On the Phone'

That story really does deserve the 3 fingers award. WELL DONE.

Do I detect a fetish?

I thought this was very good. It made me hot and in the end it made me chuckle. I don't know if that was the plan or not, but it did. A little more description might be nice, but there again, it was consistent the whole way through, and the tone was good enough to carry the story. Good job!

Would be really good to not just have dialogue, but also descriptions, what they're thinking etc.