All Comments on 'Our First Real Erotic Adventure'

on betting you can expand this... a tale from a time gone by... this has happened to you, your parents, and/or others close to you... been there done that

for a senile mind? this could be a fictional borne out of taking too many pills.

I liked your story, alittle expansion could be needed but that is a writers choice. Don't

get caught up in all the negatives you may hear. NOT BAD keep writing.

I liked this story, but wished you'd slowed down and used some hot dialog.

"Hey man, how about letting me shoot a few photos of you making love to your sexy little wife," Dave said. "Then you can shoot me and my old lady fucking," he laughed.

How do ya like it, how do ya like it. *****

Please write more.

I understand that my story is not as full of outrageous sex as other submissions.

However, it is absolutely true. The only detail changed is that Sue was not wearing the green dress I described, just something less sensual.

Would love to read more. Would you consider adding the pictures? That's the only thing that could enhance this already great story. :)

Very erotic story. I agree that posting the pics would really enhance the story. Please keep sharing your adventures with us.

You should repost this with those pictures included under "Illustrated" stories.

I loved this story. I would also love seeing the photos!

Very hot story. Being a true story makes it even hotter!

I found you through a comment on one of my stories that said my preamble was too long. I thought yours was too short! Lol.

I agree with the other comments about adding dialogue and maybe some more details.

But I would also suggest some more proofreading. I know I don't always catch all of mine, but typos mess with the flow of the story.

And yes, I would love to see the pictures too! ;->

Of course it is, I don't doubt it for a minute and that is the truth.

Very hot and sexy true account! Stimulating to say the least. I would love to possess such photos as you stated and love to see them!!

A very sexy hot story.....you continue in your own way, I can’t wait to read more. I would love to do something similar with another trusted couple watching, while enjoying each other. It is nice to read about real people with no overstated comments about perfect bodies or oversized penis, age group nails it too.

Keep writing

What a nice, erotic story! Thank you.

Ed