by Novelista
what is a week grin - must be a long one? She said "They're not going to abuse me." They already have. He was as concerned about meeting porn producers with a day old beard and clothes, as he would have been for the queen of England. Give me a break. Such money does NOT bring respectability.
re they any more are you going to continue the story?
Atlanta,Ga
So good ol' moral erotica reader "Anonymous in USA" stereotypes porn producers as not being worthy of shaving and primping. Remember, they are his daughter's future in-laws.
Respect doesn't come from one's profession.
Tsk, tsk! He only gave it a 25. So much for objective criticism. Let's hear it from the Jesus freaks - they should chime in soon on this one.
Good start - sounds like it could be an interesting read (from an erotica standpoint).
PW
I think you've got some interesting characters here, a nice little set-up, and some definite tension upcoming between the characters. Not a bad start.
My problem is this doesn't feel like a "chapter" in the Literotica sense. It's akin to watching a strip tease and having the stripper stop just as she's about to take off her bra!
Hopefully future chapters will be slightly longer.
This has the start of a great novel. I love the opposite worlds colliding.
For a beginning chapter I thought it was great. The first line doesn't have to have two people banging each other. I have read some damn good novels that held your attention very well without a tremendous amount of sex until the appropriate moment.
Don't give up the ship, stay with her.
ProfWriter doesn't like Anonymous' preaching? Profession does not determine respect? Show me a drug dealer or pimp that deserves "respect?" Those professions are as respectable as a porn producer... Or is that being stereotypical also?