All Comments on 'Owning Bella Ch. 04'

I've got to say I really love this story. Ur a great author I've read a lot of stories on here and I'm so glad ur continuing with story and will wait as long as it takes u to bring thbe next chapter

wonderful story! can't wait for the next chapter!!

I am loving this story and look forward to the next chapter!!

Wow, I just stayed up all night to finish reading all of Bella's story so far. So eloquently written, with amazing character development... I'm craving the next chapter!!! This was so worth staying up all night for, keep writing this is amazing!

Please post again soon! I love this story, you are a very talented writer!

Please keep going I love your story it was amazing and I couldn't get enough of it.

I just spent this weekend reading your wonderful stories of Mel and bella. I truly hope you continue this amazing saga. Rob seems so much more than Mel. I hope he finds love. Please continue monthly as you stated. I know you have a life and time for writing must be difficult. I read comments about type-o, who cares! Just give me the story. Please, Please, Please... Once done this could be developed in to a mainstream novel/series.

Again Thank You for entertaining me. Oh, yea, and getting me hot.

I am enthralled.

This chapter was thrilling. I am eager for the next chapters. Well done!

Although because I'm a pedant I might point out how come the hospital or her mother didn't notice the whip marks he'd just put on her before they went down to the club :P Yeah yeah I know .....pedant .

My only nitpick was the same as Spearish as to how the marks on Ellie's body were explained.

However that is minor compared to how well you have developed the characters out, including offering different viewpoints like Dianne earlier as a switch and Belinda not being interested in the lifestyle 24/7 and now Josie as a Domme!

I'm also really intrigued by the turn the plot has taken. Very well done!!

But didn't Mel put some marks on Bella right before her concussion? How long was Bella out before her mother saw her unclothed body? Wouldn't the remnants of at least some of those marks remain, like in ugly chartreuse bruises? Wouldn't Bella at least feel some anxiety over whether or not those remnants might be seen? Just a plot point.

I was thinking the same.

Fresh welts from Master before lunch date....plus older marks as well. There's no way the hospital and/or her mother wouldn't have noticed. If I was Bella I would at least be concerned b/c of a doctors duty to report to a social worker etc.

I think the marks could have been explained a little bit because she has fallen down a small flight of stairs. As she told her mother, if she does something, she does it well, including falling and concussions. This probably means she has been clumsy for a while.