by ALotInCommon
Didn’t like the pee and shit panties smelling and tasting. Turned me off. Blech!
It's good, fun. Keep it coming...
Develope your work a little more, and watch your grammar/spelling, it's sloppy and not worthy of the good writing you're producing.
A request.... go in search of some fresher meat.....
Please could you carry on writing these stories as they're really good and I love reading them.
in part i liked the story. but the shit and piss tasting turn me off. you might also like to try and keep it somewhat realistic. for instance the part when you cum all over the teacher and rub it in so it not to visible. in reality all she would have to do is have your DNA tested and you'll be in prison for rape. so if your going to be criminal. try to think like one.
Everyone in the comments telling you to get rid of the piss and shit can shove it. You have your kinks. You don't have to stop writing them to cater to anyone. Especially someone who would try to demand that you tailor-make their porn for them. They aren't entitled to anything. You do you.
Now, aside from them, this is well written. I hope you decide to continue this. With the piss play and scat intact. If you don't, I comepletely understand. This many people insisting that there's something wrong with your porn because it's not their kink is enough to discourage anyone.
I love this story. Please continue the possibilities are endless.
Betting "everyone" asking you to leave out the dirty stuff is the same person posting the same comment over and over. This reader thinks your story is fun, leave the dirty in! Others can read something else, it's tagged appropriately and easy enough to skip. I skip plenty of stories that don't turn me on around here. It's easy, try it.
So for the most part I really enjoyed it it was so great the way he had total control, but the piss and shut stuff was extremely discomforting and weird and I found myself having to skim read more and more of it as I went on, I lol forward to the next installment, however a little less focus on the bodily waste would be appreciated.
Really glad you came back to this story. There's a lot of potential. Keep writing!
I can’t really speak for everyone else but your story really turned me off.
The whole piss and shit stains and pissing on this and that really made you, the author, out to nothing more than an adolescent try to write a story on an adult site.
I would make your character grow up, and fast.
Loved the pee part! Very good series can't wait to see where it goes. Maybe a side story more dedicated to waste :)
Stop with the bodily W-A-S-T-E. It's not very appealing to most of your reader-base.
W-A-I-S-T is what you call the area around your belly. W-A-S-T-E is what you seem to be preoccupied with.