All Comments on 'Payback in the Bedroom Ch. 01'

This story unlike most will linger in my mind for hours, days, and weeks, etc. I know you wrote this years ago but could think of nothing more enjoyable then seeing were your imagination takes it.

Conceive it, Believe it, and you will Achieve it.

Finish this inspired story...

Oh my gosh! I love the characters, I can't wait to see what happens and fingers crossed for a happy ending. Very sexy. Loved it, you are amazing!

This story unlike many I have read over the years on this website is the first one I have commented on. I wonder why you havent offered the next chapter? (have I missed it?) This story has a lot of layers where you can take it anywhere...the characters are believable and the plot is a relevant and solid one. Can't wait to read the other chapters you write and thanks for sharing your talents. You can email me at that1chikk@me.com.

This story has so many layers to it. An amazing read. Please post chapter 2!

Literally orgasmic! Loved it!

5 stars .......would be fascinated to see where this story would go.

You write a five star chapter with 270,000 reads and leave us hanging for FOUR YEARS??? Not cool. :( you said it's done and just needs editing, I'd be happy to help you with that.

So what what exactly did Maggie's husband do to this soldier? Why is he "waiting to die"? Is he going to figure out that getting Maggie to fall in love with him would be sweeter revenge than raping her? We need to know!

Everyone looks for something like this to read. It has everything! Does it really NEED another chapter?! Not really. Does anyone ever have the right to be rude to an author because they want to read more?? NO!! Reading an authors' work is a privilege, not a right! We should feel grateful that we enjoyed this wonderfully written story. Period.

Everyone looks for something like this to read. It has everything! Does it really NEED another chapter?! Not really. Does anyone ever have the right to be rude to an author because they want to read more?? NO!! Reading an authors' work is a privilege, not a right! We should feel grateful that we enjoyed this wonderfully written story. Period.

Absolutely loved it.

This is what a seduction story should be like.

This is how I want to be seduced.

Sue

tell us how we arrived at this point? and who these people are?

I'd love to read it! Will y submit it please

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A stunningly good piece of writing. If it answered just a few of the questions it raises, it would be brilliant. Please finish it.

hey pentopaper!! :) somebody is a non con foreplay ace !! :)) and the mystery captor and charmers identity not revealed?! :(( booohoooooooo!!! ;)

Absolutely loved this story. I'm really hoping you give us chapter 2 because I want to know who this guy is. Seriously, I'm totally in lust/love with him. I'm hoping Maggie dumps her douchbag husband and hooks up with her "rapist." Best Non Con story I've read.

Please post chapter two I'm begging.

Loved this piece! Can't wait for the next chapter

Loved your story! Need chapter two! Beautifully written.

Your story was so good, so detailed, so complete that I hope the "Final Chapter" will be ready yesterday. I can't wait to read it.

Congratulations

keep going on second chapter

Amazing story! It's been almost 9 years since the day you submitted this... It's about time for a continuation!

I see a 7 year break, and then recently you've started posting again.

Perhaps life caused you to loose your PC/hard disk and backups. If so, please accept my condolences for what evil befell you.

Maybe you submitted Chapter 2, and the Literotica maven bounced it back so you gave up getting it published. There are other venues, and we can use Google to find you again.

But if you don't intend or can't post Chapter 2, perhaps you might add a comment to answer questions about the backstory and resolution?

Please?

Pretty Please with Sugar On Top?

I would love to see chapter 2. Do you post writing somewhere else?

Thoroughly enjoyed it, let's see what ch2. brings us

Best writing ever. Want more more more! Please

After 10 years I have gone back and reread this story. I surely misjudged it at that time. 5* all the way. Would have loved a second chapter.

Your final notes say ch 2 was finished 10 years ago. No matter how rough I'd still like to read it. PLEASE!!!!!

I still come back here to reread this wonderful, but unfortunately so short, masterpiece. Oh how I wish to see the rest of it, maybe one day? Who knows, I've already waited few years so few more ain't gonna hurt.

Hope you're well.

Part 2 plz

Please write the 2nd part!!! Such a sensual story!!

Good premise.

Interesting story line.

But it moves along as if everything were preordained.

Needs some 'action' on her part. She needs to so some serious playing with his cock, perhaps rubbing its head against her pussy/clit.

Needs some oral. Both cunnilingis and giving him a blowjob. It seemed as if that would be where it was headed when he taster her wetness on her fingers.

Fout stars.

After reading this story, I think i prefer female writers more.

Unfortunate the chapter 2 never got posted, would love to have seen this story contribute

Keep it next part

Wondering why you never submitted Chapter Two? PLEASE do! Five stars.

Great writing! And for a story where objectively not much is going on, it feels like a million things were happening. I would gladly read more from this author.

What a wonderful reading experience! Thank you, I thoroughly loved it and am dying to know what happened. Bring on Part 2, pleeeaase!

5 stars and a favourite!

Fabulous

Simply incredible. I hope you revisit this series again now that you're back to writing!

Amazing story. Crazy hot scene the one with the finger in the mouth and the kissing, my favourite part.

I did not enjoy the cum/come joke I think it is rather unrealistic to expect this confusion ever to happen mid sex. Ahhh what woman wouldn't want that guy to ravish her???

Thank you for this great story!

Amazing story. Crazy hot scene the one with the finger in the mouth and the kissing, my favourite part.

I did not enjoy the cum/come joke I think it is rather unrealistic to expect this confusion ever to happen mid sex. Ahhh what woman wouldn't want that guy to ravish her???

Thank you for this great story!

Still obsessed with this story—waiting eagerly for the next chapter!

What a nice effort by this author. I really enjoyed reading this story. I also enjoyed the ending - hoping that this isn't the end of this little tale... If you know what I mean.. 5 Stars

Marvelous premise.

Beautifully written.

Lovely buildup.

Wonderfully written.

Would have liked it if she took some initiative. Reaching for his cock and balls. Maybe wrapping his cock between her breasts and titty fucking them for a while. Maybe a bit of edging with her hands and mouth.

Neverthe less, FIVE STARS.

I expected to hate this, but it was incredible. Beautifully, sensitively written and exquisitely hot.