All Comments on 'Pens'

We're ostensibly supposed to worry if the sweet wife Donna is getting a happy ending with her session from dicey masseur. Why she would be paying a third party for a massage when budget is a bit tight and husband is certified in exactly that field is a credibility stumbling gap. To compensate, MGM pulls off a segue and literary misdirection and keeps reader entertained on husband's stunted career in this area.

I admired the author's technique in matter of how the reader is made a complicit voyeur with Gene as he reviews his spouse's rubdown replay. In terms of believing that a wife would be so forgiving upon discovery of that act. That's another stretcher. In the hands of most other authors, this hare-brained idea would have crashed and burned in a big way.

The author's background and penchant for massage plus his literary talent made this a overall quality reading experience. Now onto Sharper Image website and see if they're running a sale on those 3000$ Shiatsu recliners with ipod ports. Better then sex ? Maybe ... if your partner is not as cute, amendable and absolving as Donna.

but the build up is way too slow and long.

Good style though it seemed to draw the story out excessively. Felt like like I was doing a caterpillar in LA traffic.

Still, gave it 4* for being a bit innovative.

marriage hard enough without the b/s.

well written and enjoyable (and sexy) to read! ignore the negative comments!

Didn't like it Plot was stupid. Husband is from the dumb & dumber family.

It seems when you have massage in your story it fails.

2*s. Must be too close to autobiography, lol.

AMerryMan

It was like a modern day "Honeymooners" episode. Alice was always miles ahead of Ralph. This was about a long time married couple that added a small amount of spice to their life. It was an enjoyable tale.

Admit that buying equipment on line with your regular credit card sort of indicates he does not have a clear idea what he should do. Diane dances circles around her man. Luckily she loves him!

I like some of your stories and this the most lame, stupid story you have wrote.

"Have wrote" one anon says? I must say that Debs and I got a good laugh out of that one this morning.

Anyway, I just try to come up with different scenarios, if some enjoy that really is my only reward.

If some do not, well. At least it cost you...nothing.

I am working on a 2nd chapter, from the wife's point of view. How WOULD a real loving wife react in such a situation? I think I know how mine would, yours I confess I am not sure of.

Thanks,

MGM

At least they're not trying to pass themselves off as an author.

Thanks for the offering.

Thanks for sharing.

Only a complete moron would find any enjoyment from this idiotic tale. 1-Star

Only a complete moron would not find any enjoyment from this great tale. 5-Stars

Magmaman,

I just finished reading most of your stories in the order in which they were submitted (by the dates). (I didn't read the Sci Fi ones - they are too weird for my liking.)

You have one hell of an imagination. I liked the earlier submissions better than the recent ones

which is mightier, TK U MLJ LV NV

Your protagonist got what he deserved... for being as dumb as a bucket full of rocks.

All he has done, is give her a get-out-of-jail free card, not that she'd ever need it.

She's been hanging horns on her their whole lives and he would never have known any better, if she didn't want to bring him in from the cold. Now, she has him thinking they are exploring a little bit of kink, and that he was the one caught with his hand in the cookie jar.

She also has him thinking that the new camera is his idea, not hers, where in real life, she is finally getting off on hubby happily agreeing to let another man fuck with the beloved golden pussy, watching it, and recording it all for posterity.

Her and her big boy-toy masseur will laugh about it later as she wipes his cum from her face and offers him her asshole again.

She already knows how she is gonna get hubby to lock his cock cage all by himself... and smile like an idiot when he does so.

And the boy she danced with? You know what he said to her, looking over to hubby sitting on his hands, waiting like a good boy? He said, "How about we take this up a notch, slut? How about we make cucky suck my cum straight out of you tomorrow, instead of you putting it in his meals like you normally do?"

Has been crossed into his being a cuckold. Wants to watch wife get fingered...to being eaten...to being fucked

.... a big bore.

Fine fun story. Can't take these stories too serious. Can't take life too serious. A wife with a little play fullness is a lot of fun.

Still again. A husband willing to be a cuck, not a jealous bone in his body unable to feel anger or even resentment. You make Neville Chamberlain look like an angry forceful man. Wimpy stories, although well written. Why bother spying if you won't take action?

Fucking cuck might as well go ahead let mark fuck her.