All Comments on 'Pent-Up Release Ch. 02: Bottled Tension'

To all my readers:

Yes, this is shorter than my first chapter, and it does irk me. I must say though that Q's character is somewhat difficult to write for. I encounter him almost all the time, but honestly, I still know little about him. So please forgive me if this wasn't as well executed as my first chapter. Also, there was no actual sex between my two characters, but please know that I'm trying to stay as true to the situation as possible. I don't want this series to just be written off as another one of those "sex-only" stories. Please send feedback or leave comments so that I know what you liked and didn't like, what I could improve on, and where you would like this story to go. I am always open to suggestions.

Until next time,

NameDontMatter

A great follow-up... Q really is an interesting character, with his jerk exterior concealing his sensitive side. I think you've done a great job of it so far. I really felt quite a bit of dislike for him during the bootycall scene, but the dream sequence allowed me to reconnect with him, thankfully. I also loved the fact that Dee wouldn't stand for his nonsense

Just Write!

5*****

please write more. this reminds me a lot of me and my friend

The wait for the next one is killing me. please write more

I loves Q's character. The dream scene definitely allowed readers see his sensitive side!

Please enhance the quality of your writing to the way it was in the first chapter. A story gets uninteresting when the characters have poor grammar. Just because they are in college doesn't mean they have to speak poorly. Also, the part where Dee cuts off Q's dialogue is irritating. I highly suggest not doing that in your next chapter. Overall, this was a letdown.

Love it! More please!

Ok, the other girl may give it away too easily, but I just hated the way he spoke to her! Who does he think he is? Asshole! And why the hell didn't he use a condom with her if she's such a slut? The same with Dee. She fucks him with no condom while she knows he's a playboy AND she lets him cum inside her? I don't like being the boring voice of wisdom or reason, but I'd like some more responsible and sensible characters. It will be more believable. He's afraid of pregnancy but not STDs? I like the story but I hope they both row up in the next chapters which I 'm looking forward to reading

Chapter 3 of Pent-Up Release, "Jungle Heat," is now live. Enjoy!

http://www.literotica.com/s/jungle-heat-1