All Comments on 'Play Date Ch. 01'

"Princess" in Spanish is princesa. I got really distracted from the story at that part, and I think any other Spanish speaker would be, too. Fresa means strawberry. If you're going to have a Spanish-speaking character, at least try to portray the language responsibly. It's quite offensive that you couldn't even open a translator and yet tag your story as "latina."

Good story, the personalities came through very well. Your bio suggests that you 'hate' writing these but you have a real touch - so don't quit. Thanks.

Hurry w/ part 2.

I can't wait for chapter 2!

MDA

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