All Comments on 'Plaything of the Gods Ch. 04'

The writing from a technical point of view was never awe inspiring, but now the problems are killing me. Random tense changes are everywhere. A character will finish a long speech but for some reason not seem like the were talking to the other character. Random spelling problems are present but easier to live with.

On another note, your terminology doesnt match the time at all. No one said boobs in ancient greece. Admittedly they werent speaking english. But i think we all envision speech then containing more proper words, not words used by elementary school children and porn sites.

And on that note your dirty talk was lame. It would make a warrior blush? Really? It wouldnt make my mother blush. Shed just tell you to stop swearing. You basically just had whatshername say fuck a bunch.

I'm completely enjoying this tale. Maybe because i prefer to read for enjoyment rather then the cheep thrill of ripping someone else's work apart by searching for errors real or perceived ?

I love this story don't let some dick or pussy since they don't have the guts 2 put who they r on here get u down k if u like it and someone else does who give a shit what someone will say couse they don't talk like they did over 2000 years ago keep it up I love it if u don't say so but if ur gonna put down the work at least have the balls 2 say who u r

Looks like you could take lessons in english grammar. Don't ever write a story, it would be unreadable.