All Comments on 'Pool Party'

I wish it were me you invited over.

Like the story, sounds more like you actually belong together, like it was something you both wanted for a long time. Would like a follow up. What happened after that day? Did you start dating?

Not a bad story, but you start in the past tense, then slip into the present tense. A bit confusing....

Excellent story... much better than most postings here

A lot of good possibilities here, but for some reason you did not use them....