All Comments on 'Prized Inheritance Ch. 01'

Definitely too short, and I didn't really understand what was going on the whole time...is it supposed to be that the reader is as clueless as Jack?

too short intro but the players are well defined. A hint of what will be a very wicked long story.

Hot, well written, but spell check and grammar check. Also is it Jack or JAKE??? The mistakes are distracting to an otherwise engaging, hot storyline.

I agree with the need of an editor for Spelling and grammar.

I couldn't count ALL the mistakes!