by HornyTeenBoy
You couldve done ten times a better job if you had done the story first person instead of third person view, try it.
You cant observe and tell us what the characters feel, be the protagonist when you write, the result will be far more intense and realistic. Dont watch them, be them.
2 naked straight guys in a pool
and next thing you know they are lapping cum
and popping cherrys
I liked the sexual heat generated by two horny young guys in a cool pool in the middle of the night! I could feel it all!