All Comments on 'Quincunx Ch. 05'

This story is really starting to get good. I look forward to future chapters! Wish they were longer than two pages though.

I agree, this story is getting better and has the potential to be great. I personally like the two page length since I don't have time to read much at a sitting.

Well done.

Story is forming nicely, the length of each chapter bothers me only so far as I have to wait to read more. Keep up the good work. This has the makings of a very long tale and I hope you don't end it any time soon

At first I wasn't feeling your story, too much sex, not enough story...

Just when I started thinking maybe I'll follow the rest... there's no more...

Please continue story.

~D~

its kind of good but im really not liking Rash at the moment

i wasn't liking the early story as it was bland and repetitive, not to mention there was too much unimaginative sex. This chapter was definitely interesting and hopefully marks a turning point in the story, or at least in my waning interest. Good Work. hope to see more like it!

hate that the 2 bitches don't get punished

But way too short. These feel like incomplete chapters, because nothing of any real consequence happens over any particular one other than the first. Pretty much their entire travel to the city could have been covered in one chapter.