All Comments on 'Rachel's Lust Awakens'

No conflict , conflict moves a story around. I, as a reader, dont care for shiny happy people laughing. I want to see them bitch and quarrel and finding themselves in a crucible of conflict.

Make her or Derek work for sex. Put an envy boyfriend/husband/girlfriend in the middle. Maybe racial tension.

The good:

Nice sex scene.

Good style.