by iLUVmoms
As if all this illegal activity would be easy to pull off. How dumb.
I stopped reading when an innocent was being used and held responsible for the actions of others (the guilty parties-her husband and sister). He’s no hero and I don’t feel sorry for him at all. He needs intense psychotherapy and LOTS of jail time!
Main character is 25. His enemy from high school has a 21 year old daughter. Was the husband, a father at the age of 4?
Worst grammar and vocabulary I have seen lately: "that it had to of been Jackie." "I leave a couple of miles down."
Her dress was above her "waste..." I fear this story is a "waist."
this is a good story but you must remeber what your writing about.
You said Louis is 25 and Diana and greg have a 21 year old daughter, so Greg could not of been at school with you.
other wise its a good story
Just a few constructive comments. You need to check your spellings before posting. It spoilt an otherwise good basic plot. Keep writing and ignore the trash comments stories like this get.