All Comments on 'Ride For The Sun Ch. 02'
by woodmanone
- 31 Comments
hodunkalmost 13 years agoA terriffic story as per usual. My only negative is "It sure was to short". I can only hope that there are more coming, as I really like woodmanones writing. These old west storys are superb,and only woodmanone is writing them at this point. MORE PLEASE
Nodrog99almost 13 years agoI agree with Hodunk - would have liked a longer story and I hope there a more to come
BigJohn601almost 13 years agoCan't wait for the next installment. I admire how you keep tying in characters and locals from your previous stories. Keep em coming...Purdy Please.
mokkelkealmost 13 years agoyou said the end. but i hoped there would be more to this little tale. emma and rafe together...
donaldealmost 13 years agoi love this tale and i hope you have more chapters coming .
was well written and very enjoyable to read thank you for posting
Anonymousalmost 13 years agoI join the chorus, Woody, in hope that you will add another episode to get Rafe and Emma started in their married life with family and on their own ranch.
Anonymousalmost 13 years agobut it seems incomplete. I would love to see another installment and find out what happens to the tradition-bound Juanita.
Deckviewalmost 13 years agoBut I suggest you find yourself an editor, and I don't mean a line editor. To take your writing to the next level, you could use advice from a more advanced editor who can annotate things like repetition, how to improve interior dialogue, plot movement, tension, and subtle changes in point of view. Toward the end, you moved to the horse's POV. Do you really want that?
You do write well and tell a good yarn, and your writing is improving, but you could take the writing up another notch.
Kolrinalmost 13 years agoA pity this story is so short. I like your western stories. You either learned what you're writing about, or you've done damn good research, but it sure as hell looks like you know what you're writing about. That makes your stories really engaging. I hope to read more some time.
sailordblj1966almost 13 years agoWoodman another great chapter keep up the great work and I can't wait for more of this story
Anonymousalmost 13 years agoexcellent so far , I hope there is more coming , to many loose ends that need to be tied up .
Sidney43almost 13 years agoLike others commented, a nice story, but it felt a little rushed at the end. You have a good command of the period you write about and of the area of the west that are used as your locations. This could well be expanded into another chapter or two, because the budding attraction between Molly and Rafe is cut off at this point.
Looking forward to your next story.
catman71almost 13 years agonot in so much a continuation, but what happens a few years down the road. like if rafe becomes a sheriff or takes over the r bar r
Scorpio44almost 13 years agoIt's well written and paced. Thanks.
Anonymousover 12 years agoAlthough I gave your story a 5 (most of it was pretty good), there was one phrase that was so irritating and unacceptable that I considered a 1. Instead I decided to point out the obnoxious and (in my opinion) inappropriate phrase: "THE END"
My guess is that most of your readers will agree with me.
In any case, THANK YOU!
oldwayneover 12 years agoI did say outstanding, didn't I? Thanks for your story.
Anonymousabout 12 years agoI am convinced you know Arizona well from personal experience now. At least from Showlow, Eager and Young, Payson, Happy Valley, Lake Mary, Verde river, down to Phoenix, up to Black Canyon and Flagstaff. Probably over to Prescott, Sedona, Williams and West as well. Good job writing. I guess I will have to read more stories to see. Ron Wood
Rawmaster50almost 11 years agoEnjoyed the story so far but see another chapter. Sounds like a lot of the stories that are told in this part of the country. History at it's best.
rightbankover 8 years agoand a tad bumfuzzled. The tale concludes (?) with The End, but by lookin off to the East I can see Ch. 03. I'm guessin there is still more ridin afore we reach the end of the trail.
Anonymousover 7 years agoAs usual, you know how to write a proper western tale. Good story line and well told. Characters well defined and you do know your terriority, especially Arizona. A true 5 from me with no negatives. Thanks for sharing. BK
Bo47over 7 years agoTrue to the best westerns traditions! It's not a stroke story, thank goodness. It is about interesting locations and doings. It's also pretty true to the type of men and women who lived in that period, my grandpa being one.
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