by Goldeniangel
I am surprised that they did not notice Erin there staring at them
Each chapter is better than the one before.
i-lick-pussy_Taliea.
Angel,
ignore the negative comments, coz they are talkin out of their butts!!
Loved this chapter. Can identify with the whole `scared of sexuality thing!'
Very real.
love it
Amba
xx
Looking forward to more!!
Keep up the good work, it's really starting to get interesting.
I liked it, it got my imagination running about things to come. I think that it's ok to take a slow pace, we are talking about a girl who is just discovering her own sexuality, and all the kinky aspects of it. So many lesbian/bi stories on here are too quick, not enough developement and undescriptive sex. Yours is refreshing, thank you for writing it.
For Ch 3, this was a very disapointing story, you got me slightly interested, then stopped. What's up? How about some sex?
to be a writer, you must carry a story to its logical conclusion, which you failed to do. I am not going to ask u a bunch of stupid Q's, about the story line, but u need to carry on.
Perhaps when u write the WHOLE thing, it will make a better story
Rudy