All Comments on 'Roommates'

but it was too short

You really need to take greater advantage of figurative language... your story seemed somewhat dry, which really detracts from its plausibility as well. For instance, "it was the greatest feeling he had ever experienced" could be rewritten to be more personally descriptive, and less broad.

Very nice story but I was disappointed that it was so short. there must be som much more to tell.