by secretsxywriter
Great story line. Perfect pace. We need to know where this goes. Many possibilities. Please - more.
You probably know this already, but you are a fantastic writer. I loved this story, it was perfect.
The way you set the story up was marvelous, not to mention the great writing after! I caught no mistakes in grammar, but that might be because the story was so hot. You're definitely one of my favorite writers!
This is without a doubt the best, hottest, story I have ever read on this site.
You're a great writer. Just came across this story. Will now read others. Great job. Keep writing.
My title says it all, almost...
You really know how to write about how to love the way I like to make love! Your portrayal of lovemaking seems so real to me. Of course, being a male, maybe I'm missing something?
Keep writing please!!!
Aloha from Hawaii,
Glenn
Great little short story. I especially liked how you used the lightning flashes to accentuate your imagery. Good stuff.
I have two wishes: 1.} I wish my first time was half that good. 2.} I wish every young person's first time was like this.
Bravo and BLESS YOU!!!
I agree with the commenter who wishes his/her first time was this good. Or even close.4*