by secretsxywriter
I agree with the commenter who wishes his/her first time was this good. Or even close.4*
I have two wishes: 1.} I wish my first time was half that good. 2.} I wish every young person's first time was like this.
Bravo and BLESS YOU!!!
Great little short story. I especially liked how you used the lightning flashes to accentuate your imagery. Good stuff.
My title says it all, almost...
You really know how to write about how to love the way I like to make love! Your portrayal of lovemaking seems so real to me. Of course, being a male, maybe I'm missing something?
Keep writing please!!!
Aloha from Hawaii,
Glenn
You're a great writer. Just came across this story. Will now read others. Great job. Keep writing.
This is without a doubt the best, hottest, story I have ever read on this site.
The way you set the story up was marvelous, not to mention the great writing after! I caught no mistakes in grammar, but that might be because the story was so hot. You're definitely one of my favorite writers!
You probably know this already, but you are a fantastic writer. I loved this story, it was perfect.
Great story line. Perfect pace. We need to know where this goes. Many possibilities. Please - more.