by beagle9690
Like it.But needs another chapter.Would love to read other part.
You really really need something to distinguish the constant switches between their pov. It was immensely frustrating trying to constantly figure out who was talking or thinking rsolely through context through the whole story. This is a problem in more than just this story.
I liked this story. It had a little bit of just about everything. Ominous, silly, funny, playful, romance and sex. What’s not to like? As far as POV changes, I had that pretty much figured out by the end of the first page, so no worries mate. I believe this one is certainly a Five Star effort.