by ishouldnot
Excellent story! I loved the imagery and the internal thoughts about Sarah. She must be one beautiful girl. Very talented writer
Thanks,
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The story was very nice, but you left off by calling her a shemale. A minor mistake, but most trans ladies would take offense to it. Just saying. Looking forward to chapter 2.
...As it brought your characters into focus and they were your best asset. Really liked both primary chars, narrator and Sarah were pretty well fleshed out for the length of the storyline (yes, I'd have loved to see it longer too :) Acceptance is everything to the TG and this was handled really well, made me like both of them even more. Thanks for sharing such a lovely tale of erotic love and acceptance, and I'll be looking for more entries. Cheers! --- Josie
You need to spend more time proofreading and checking sentence structure.
Excellent start, add more chapters please
A good start for your first story. You left it off where your could easily add another chapter to the story. I did like the story but it could be improved. I would suggest that you proof read your story or have an editor read it before you submit it. I found a bunch of typo errors like off/of and tingue/tongue for example. Look forward to seeing your next chapter to this story.
I love it a lot one of the best for a long time keep written these type of story's
Quite a few guys would like tranny experience. It is exciting and can be best ot both worlds.
Mentioning whether a cock is cut or uncut doesn't really fit in with the story, try getting an editor.
Also being six foot and having eight inches you think you are special by the sounds of it, stick to being more realistic.
You know how sometimes people post a good story and then never anything else, don't be one of those people. Left off on a huge tease and now I need to read about Sarah plowing his ass like cheap farm land.