All Comments on 'Sauce for the Goose'

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rbloch66rbloch669 months ago

He’s right. He asked her a couple of times if something was wrong and she chose not to communicate. He responded appropriately.

AnonymousAnonymous10 months ago

A husband with a back bone. What a concept.

RuttweilerRuttweiler11 months ago
Copy of a copy of a copy

It’s obvious that you’ve read a bunch of stories, and want to write your own story too. But you haven’t written your own story, you’ve copied a bunch of other authors.

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

The nerve of that asshole scolding her for not communicating. Another story pandering to the "woman is always wrong" crowd.

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

"When you assume, you make an *** out of you and me"... to go ballistic means someone has pulled the trigger?

Barst0hBoyBarst0hBoyover 1 year ago

Wait, wait wait. A story can't contain the whole universe of possibilities. True, we (authors) praise decisive men who have been cheated on and choose a similar path, but their marriages are still over. A two page story just can't contain everything. I like the conclusion reached by this husband. Her actions had exposed a fundamental flaw in her makeup...just as those praiseworthy (air quotes) men in similar situations expose themselves. The net result is the same or maybe slightly different depending on the characterization of the wife.

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

Wait...in every LW story..i have seen the husband in this same situation do exactky shat she did...... and we praise him for being decisive!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 2 years ago

If the woman was that cruel and hateful there would have been serious problems in the marriage way before this incident happened, this just didn't ring true for me.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 2 years ago

I agree with the husband.

MaximusTheMadMaximusTheMadabout 2 years ago

it was interesting. I agree with the previous commenter that he was definitely not blameless but I also agree that their marriage was probably over. I think maybe some counseling could have helped in this case but probably not. He should have given it a try at least.

BlueEyd2BlueEyd2about 2 years ago

I was gling to give it 4 stars, but went to 3. He lied to her about what he was doing. She did ask him and he was evasive. After he lied and misled her she jumped to the wrong conclusions. He has lots of skin in the game in terms of blame.

She went overboard, but he was far from blameless.

BuzzCzarBuzzCzarabout 2 years ago

Best version of a revenge fuck I've come across.

BlueEyd2BlueEyd2about 2 years ago

A revenge fuck with no proof is used way too much on this site.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 2 years ago

At 6:07 on a Monday, Elaine watched her marriage come to an end.

She deserved it!

jflindersjflindersover 2 years ago

I have trouble believing how people miss the point of him finding her and stopping her from her stupid revenge fuck. As he told her clearly, he did it for her, so she'd feel less guilty for her actions. She hadn't actually gotten to the point of adultery.

On the other hand, she had done plenty to cause him to decide he didn't want to remain in the marriage. His decision to divorce her made perfect sense.

5 stars.

dirtyoldbimandirtyoldbimanover 2 years ago

talk first, then decide what to do is an important lesson. well written. "what's good enough for the Goose is good enough for the Gander". sauce? never heard of.

JustOneMansOpinionJustOneMansOpinionover 2 years ago

I agree with Regguy69, couldn't have said it better. That said, I think he should rethink hid options. But that's just me, because I like happy endings.

Hiram325Hiram325over 2 years ago

Actions have consequences. Good tale, well told.

Regguy69Regguy69over 2 years ago

Some of the comments sound like they read a different story, or only part of this story. He explained why he stopped her and then why he was leaving her. He also explained why he hid the daughter from his wife. This story points out how ridiculous the revenge fuck video is. Get the facts and THEN react.

tizwickytizwickyover 2 years ago

Why did he go looking for her if he knew that he was going to divorce her? Why did he hide the daughter he just found out about from his wife it makes no sense at all.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 3 years ago

I don’t understand. He knew when watching the video that his wife was going to cheat on him because she believed that he cheated on her. So why did try to stop her if he was going to divorce her anyway? Kind of stupid logic.

MightyheartMightyheartalmost 3 years ago

Good take on revenge sex.

Needs a sequel.

Make it a RAAC

She needs a punishment but forgiveness for her idiocy

Wolf_Man_1962Wolf_Man_1962about 3 years ago
Good Story

I can't believe how many commenters are missing the irony here. She jumps to all these conclusions only to find out how wrong she truly is. In the end he does to her what she already did to him. But the best part is...this is all made up and no one got hurt or cheated on! It's not real people so can the vitriol and move onto the next story. Great job C, 5*

AnonymousAnonymousover 3 years ago
I'm not so sure....

that the marriage couldn't have been fixed. He bore some blame for sneaking around with his daughter and should certainly see how it could be very reasonably misconstrued. She should have talked to him. He should have realized how much more sensitive she was to the cheating issue because of having previously having been cheated on. Her plan to get back at him was clearly wrong. But, in context, his decision was precipitous. In real life, the wife would have learned an important lesson and probably have been as close to a model wife as possible.

Still, it's an interesting well written story. 5

26thNC26thNCover 3 years ago
Read again

Sometimes things go too far to take back. Elaine went to far and broke up her second marriage.

Demosthenes384bcDemosthenes384bcover 3 years ago

Only a couple stories in and you're extremely talented at capturing the human spirit, both good and bad. I wouldn't have done what he did in the end, but I can see many that would. Thanks for sucking me into your universe. 5*

AnonymousAnonymousover 3 years ago

There's so many Feminazi here, bunch of morons

AnonymousAnonymousover 3 years ago
Hypocrite,

Weak. He is doing exactly what he accused her of. And destroying their marriage. Maybe she would have had her fling and forgiven him. He dumps her without any conversation.

ctdansctdansover 3 years ago
he is right

Her inner self came out. Someone that takes that level of attempt to hurt someone can't be trusted. What happens next time? A knife in the back?

Had she gone off and had divorce papers served that would be bad but you can overcome that. This was torture.

AnonymousAnonymousover 3 years ago
dill of a story

So it's ok for him to get on a pedestal and preach about her jumping to conclusions and acting in a wrong way. And him jumping to conclusions to what her reactions might be to a sudden appearance of a daughter and therefore lying makes things o.k.?? I call that misogynistic bullshit. No wonder his first marriage didn't work out, he's just an asshole, she's better of without him.

AnonymousAnonymousover 3 years ago

He could see the writing on the wall. She was not going to talk about or even confirm what she THOUGHT she saw. wrong answer. I like the story. well written. 5 stars

gamblnluck

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 4 years ago
He already wanted out.

People do stupid shit all the time in the heat of anger. She had plenty of circumstantial evidence and he was keeping secrets. They need counseling not a divorce. If I were her, I would fight for it and force the issue. If he refuses then HE isnt worth it. Yeah she did a dumb thing. That's what happens when couples DONT COMMUNICATE

dgfergiedgfergiealmost 4 years ago
Real life

It is a sad story and some us who are hurt by infidelity react a lot differently.

You hear about real life divorces where couples want to kill each other and take the other one to the cleaners. This getting even thing it is just that but there is no getting even. If your partner wants to screw around you either accept it or end the relationship. There is nothing you can do to change someone you either except who they are or you leave the relationship. That's basically what happened here, the wife was hurt and because of past problems she sought revenge instead of communicating. Remember the line from the Karate Kid: "You seek revenge start digging two graves, one for you and on for the other person"

one other thought: "Man's (or woman's) ability to rationalize anything has no limits"

AnonymousAnonymousabout 4 years ago
Define 'comprehension'

Judging from the comments, I think most people have problems comprehending what they read. He's not divorcing her because she misunderstood the situation and got angry; he even admitted he probably would have done the same if the situation was reversed.

He's getting rid of her because of her vicious, over-the-top response. She was being as cruel as possible, eager to hurt and inflict pain, without even bothering to ask him about it. Who wants to be married to someone with that in her? Her first response is to slash, burn, and destroy.

It was her sadistic initial response that drove him away. You can blame the husband if it makes you feel better, but who wants to be married to a monster?

widowedidiotwidowedidiotover 4 years ago
Good argument?

Where was the trust when he first found out he had a daughter? He made the excuse of her being hurt at the knowledge because she couldn´t have any children. But that was just an excuse, I´m not saying I condone what she did, but I think he´s as much to blame for keeping secrets from her. Of course this is fiction and it´s nothing new this story has been going on forever only the names have been changed. But to try to make the man just a fraction from being a saint?

QuintiusQuintiusover 4 years ago
Read this type of nonsense before

As soon as she pulled the "I'll get revenge by fucking someone else!" crap I started skimming. It's been done so many times before that as soon as it happened I knew she'd misunderstood what was going on and was going to shoot herself in the foot. It's a poor plot device and loses the character any sympathy they might have had earlier in the story. Anyone that spiteful, mistrustful, and vengeful doesn't deserve to stay married. All she had to do was confront him with the pictures and phone calls and it would have blown over. She's fatally stupid and it ruined the story.

26thNC26thNCover 4 years ago
Once again

Another story worth reading again. Wonderful ending.

newtinmplsnewtinmplsabout 5 years ago
Well I admit

I didn't see that coming.

On the other hand, I can't imagine a scenario where some bombshell like that happens and one spouse delays talking to the other. Maybe I'm weird that way, but why all the ongoing secrecy.

Do I think it was right/reasonable to do what she did? ....Not sure. For me I lean toward "no" as anything that doesn't start with communication isn't going to work - but if she didn't trust him enough to talk, and he didn't trust her enough to talk, then there wasn't much foundation there - and that's a sad thing.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 5 years ago
Unbelievable

Unbelievable; not so much the story but the vitriolic comments/feedback it's generated. You must be delighted at the hornets nest you've stirred up.

Some people need to chill and realize that this story is designed to provoke a reaction.

The misandrists out there will hurriedly blame the evil male for everything as usual. However, take a breath & read it again. I have no doubt that any logical review will see that the wife overreacted and her "punishment" of her husband was disproportionate. It's not what did or did not happen but the total and complete lack of trust, respect and love. The intention was to hurt, humiliate and destroy.

Tom, the other man is almost as much to blame by fully intending to sleep with a married woman no matter what tale she span.

Being prepared to carry out an action but being prevented from doing so, is the same as actually completing the action.

Imagine someone standing on the sidewalk/pavement outside a bank wearing a ski mask, brandishing a shotgun and carrying a holdall (with SWAG written on it). This person then shouts that they intend to rob the bank and is arrested by police as they enter the building. The haven't actually stolen any money, yet they fully intended to do so. They have actually committed a crime, even though they may not have made away with the loot.

Doubtless I will get the usual barrage of insults and claims of misogyny but I still enjoyed the story. Regards Steffi.

DarkerBindingDarkerBindingabout 5 years ago
Good version of "what you saw isn't what you think..."

Sort of the cliche "its not what you think" for cheaters, except ... it's not. I enjoyed it.

Like Sam, i'd never have been able to stay in a marriage where my partner was ready to go nuclear with no discussion and all based on seeing activity that was "public appropriate" not explicit (for example finding me screwing someone).

For a short story, where things had to happen in not too many paragraphs, this one was fun and handled well.

kmreaderkmreaderabout 5 years ago
Enjoyed this story but...

I have to say I saw this coming almost immediately. Young girl, no confrontation with the husband, I immediately thought this is his unknown daughter or some other family member. Then per the title I knew how this was going to end. The only surprise for me was him bursting in to stop her rather than a final confrontation after the fact. Still a nice story with good dialogue and worth the read.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 5 years ago
Nice!

Well conceived, sharply paced and with a good punchy conclusion.

The whingers may whine but reciprocity sucks doesn't it?

5*

meucimeuciabout 5 years ago
great story

You know stories are great when you have this much arguing in the comments. I only read 1 comment where a lady said I would have stopped my car and confronted him. Just think years later they would have had a funny story and best of all still been married and maybe even a few grandkids to dote over.

PowersworderPowersworderabout 5 years ago

That was an excellent twist on the revenge fuck cliche, with the husband getting there in time to stop it... then still divorcing the vengeful wife.

To all the people complaining that the husband is overreacting, I think there's another factor at play.

Remember that they just found out that Elaine can't have children. Sam wanted kids too and has just been reunited with a long-lost daughter, stirring up parental feelings and probably resentment that he missed out on her formative years. Elaine just revealed a really ugly and cruel side to her character, which is the perfect excuse to divorce the barren bitch.

Now he can ditch Elaine without looking like an asshole, then find himself a younger fertile replacement. Maybe Susan has some hot friends looking for a sugar-daddy? This is literotica after all! ;-)

AnonymousAnonymousabout 5 years ago

I don’t think the dark donuts read the same story as the rest of us. As others have said, this was a very good story.

dark2donut2dark2donut2over 5 years ago
Well, good start lousy ending

You had an idea (lost daughter) and started well but then you driveled the psychobabble ending.

The wife character did not cheat and had every reason to believe she was cheated on. Instead of making something reasonable out of it you made "Sam" going bonkers and start spouting nonsense.

Intelligent people these are not and the story itself is also moronic due to ending psychobabble.

darthdaxdarthdaxalmost 6 years ago
Damn that was a good one!!

I wish i could erase my memory so i could enjoy this story as much as i did the first time I read it. But even tho I can't I've still read it several times since then and still enjoy it.

Thanks, I really enjoy your writing!

26thNC26thNCalmost 6 years ago
Interesting

Different kind of story. Didn't see that ending coming, but loves it.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 6 years ago
I can't believe it. I loved it.

All the others stories have wimpy husbands. Everything this husband said in the hotel rings clear and true. And divorcing her is the right thing. Finally a husband with testicular fortitude. Yay.

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
I liked the story ending.

The husband didn't do anything wrong. His wife was paranoid like a lot of Americans and jumped to a bad conclusion. If she really loved him, she would have confronted him about the girl. She obviously decided that she had to hurt him, that isn't love! How could he remain married when he couldn't trust her to do the right thing for their marriage.

SomeOneTwoThreeSomeOneTwoThreealmost 7 years ago
Interesting story.

Both of them are to blame in this story.

Her blame is explained in the story.

Other comments, from readers here,

have mentioned his blame.

Except for one. One critical one.

Her former hurtful breakup.

That makes it difficult for her to

trust again.

He must have known that.

Yet, he didn't consider that a factor

in her response.

So both of their reactions were brutal.

And their weak relationship couldn't

handle that.

The ghost of former relationships killed

this one. Those who have been there,

probably understand this story better

than others.

Still a very good story, well written

and though out.

Top rating from me.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 7 years ago
Well,

now she gets to fuck Tom with a clear conscience because her husband was a conniving dick who didn't talk to her!

networkgurunetworkguruabout 7 years ago
His first Reaction

To finding out he had a daughter should have been "Hey honey, I think I have a kid from my previous marriage. I want to try and find out what this is about. I'll let you know as soon as I can."

AnonymousAnonymousabout 7 years ago
What a gutless, self centered bastard!

I guess he's never made a mistake or jumped to a conclusion himself. IF you truly love someone you forgive them their shortcomings. His attitude was disgusting. This may be a fictional story and these people don't exist, but boy did this ending suck! One of the worst endings - ever.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 7 years ago
1*

fucking assholes. everyone of them.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 8 years ago
Moral of the story???

Stop trying to occupy the moral high ground!! Everyone acted badly.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 8 years ago
To all the negative comments about what the characters did or didn't do, should have or shouldn't have done.......

It's just a story, damn it, and it's the author's story, not yours. Read it for what it is. Enjoy it, or don't. Don't speculate about what his characters in real life should do.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 8 years ago
Unbelievable comments

It's amazing that the commenters here jump to the same conclusion that she did. He's with a woman in a hotel room and there are calls on the home phone and she instantly jumps to the conclusion that he's out screwing around. In her mind there can be no other explanation. So, what's the first thing she does? Does she confront him? No. Does she gather evidence that actually proves her accusations? No. She gets a friend, who would probably take her side no matter what and gets a little more circumstantial evidence then arranges to fuck some random asshole. (Sorry, Tom apparently thought she was available).

HEY PEOPLE! Stop jumping to the same conclusion without proper evidence!

The one major flaw I see in a huge number of these stories is when the men think their wives are cheating, they gather absolute evidence; pictures, recordings, multiple witnesses, and then act. The women see the guy glance at another woman in passing, figure he must be fucking them, and go out on a revenge fuck. This just makes women look stupid.

'Oh by the way honey, I saw you kissing some guy on the cheek, so I went out and fucked your girlfriend!

Jack, don't you remember that he's my brother? You met him at our wedding.

Oh yeah, that's right. I forgot. Sorry. It won't happen again. I'm sure we can get past this. It was only sex. It's not that I love her or anything.'

It just sounds so stupid. It's a good thing they didn't have kids. People like her shouldn't reproduce.

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
he's lying his ass off

No man takes a woman hes not sleeping with to a motel, and theres no way his so called daughter is dumb enough to go to one with a strange man. Completely ridiculous abd lying to his wife about s operating that important sites no respect for her.

TonyKiwiTonyKiwiover 8 years ago
agreed c24j

he did lie to his wife but should she then torture him mentally and cheat on him, I think not. So many times in these stories they get back together but his comment ( it's a statement of who you are ) sums up why this marriage is over. TK

c24jc24jover 8 years ago
He's a hypocrite !!

It's not who you lie with . . . it's who you lie to !!

He lied to his wife, pure and simple. He had a bunch of excuses, but he lied, not just by omission but by actually claiming nothing else happened the day she asked, when in truth, something really, really important and life-changing happened. HE obviously didn't value the marriage enough to tell Elaine the truth about his supposed 'daughter' (and there's no evidence Susan actually proved to him that he was her father). Then he has to gall to claim that Elaine didn't value the marriage or trust him. Yet, he put the needs of this woman who claimed to be his daughter AHEAD of his wife's, WHO HE SHOULD HAVE TOLD RIGHT AWAY!!! No matter what he claimed, there is simply no excuse for not telling her!

And while it's true that she MIGHT have screwed Tom, even she has no way of being sure if she would have gone through with it or not. More importantly, Sam even admits it wasn't the kiss, and maybe not even the potential fuck that destroyed the marriage, but the lack of trust and not talking to him. So in his convoluted logic, it's okay for him to lie, obfuscate, meet another woman at a hotel, kiss that woman, put that woman's wants and needs above his wife's, and keep it all secret from his wife . . . but it's not okay for her to be upset and consider revenge. At least she didn't lie to him about it. He's an incredible hypocrite!

Sam is the real cheat here, and the one who devalued the marriage. Thankfully this incident brought his true character to light before he and Elaine adopted any kids. Elaine may jump to conclusions too quickly, but Sam is really messed up, and no way he should be allowed to spread these convoluted values to kids.

Elaine should contact Susan and thank her, and then warn her, whether she's really Sam's daughter or not, to steer clear of the lying, arrogant, misogynistic prick.

Good story with clever misdirection from the true villain!

dyonysosdyonysosabout 9 years ago
Revenge fuck

In my experience revengefucks never work,right after it you feel exactly the same,sometimes even worse

This story could have gone both ways,if he would have told his wife about his daughter none of the following would have happend

RhomanovRhomanovabout 9 years ago
*****

It can be amazing how emotional responses can be so over the top. Till seen in the light of a clear day.

doveryai, no proveryai! 😎

javmor79javmor79almost 10 years ago
Victory not worth the fight.

This was a smart man. He didn't look at the fact that he got there just in time to save her from cheating. He looked at the fact that he HAD to save her from cheating. She was still carrying around baggage from her last marriage. She hadn't dealt with some things from that time period, and that is what was motivating her to do this. He recognized that this distrustful person was WHO she was. Sure, they could have gone to counseling and probably worked things out. They probably might have had a decent marriage going forward. In order for that to happen, the victory had to be worth the fight.

She chose to head for the hills at the first sign of trouble. That was her FIRST instinct. This is a mindset of hers. Though the situations will change, this will always be her first instinct until she unlearns it. That was not something that he wanted to deal with. The victory (having her by his side) was not worth the fight (dealing with her insecurities and "flight" mentality).

rightbankrightbankalmost 10 years ago
don't assume

or as a former president once

trust, but verify.

IronDragonIronDragonabout 10 years ago
Textbook case.

This is a textbook case of why "revenge fucks" don't work. There was a definite lack of communication on both sides, but I have to say that the wife's lack of communication; without even a confrontation before planning her "revenge fuck" was far worse than Hubby not telling her about his daughter. He had valid points about confrontation before condemnation.

IF for some odd reason my wife were to catch me kissing a woman she didn't know on the cheek, there would be HELL to pay. Yes, in all capital letters. Same would go the other way, too. We both know that revenge fucks don't work, but communication does. Great cautionary tale about jumping to the wrong conclusions and failing to confront or communicate.

5 Solid Stars.

KAIJFKAIJFabout 10 years ago
Bullshit

He didn't trust her to tell her the truth. I guess there wouldn't be a story otherwise...

Anyway I liked it!

TavadelphinTavadelphinover 10 years ago
That was a great ending -

Painful but great - he was right - when she had made up her mind she was ruthless, uncaring and vicious - to the man she claimed to love. But oops - she was wrong!!!

You get to make your choices - you then get to pay for them = he met his daughter when she was not around to have the conversation with and honored his daughters concerns by not saying anything right away - no foul there - his concern was for both his wife and his child - not just himself like her actions -

betrayedbylovebetrayedbylovealmost 11 years ago
Excellent

Check the facts before you do something you'll regret. Ask the cunt in this tale. She found out the hard way.

HA HA HA

cantbuymycantbuymyover 11 years ago

excellent story and what happens with a revenge fuck.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Wow!

Incredible emotion here - you got my full attention. Please write more stories even though it appears you haven't in quite a while.

tazz317tazz317almost 12 years ago
PMS AND SCORNED WOMEN

dont always exhibit good sense,,,,,TK U MLJ LV NV

Danger09Danger09almost 12 years ago
Perfect !

He's absolutely right! How was fucking Tom make things better? If that was me & I saw my husband coming out of a hotel. & kissing some chic I'd get out of my car & confront him! I won't go out fucking some random dude trying to extract my fuck'd up version of revenge... Everything Sam said I agree... She didn't trust him or their marriage... How is acting like a complete slut hurts him ? If anything he'll probably be disgusted...

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
How many minutes till Wapner, huecuck?

The Rain Man of cuckoldry!

Johnny1MJohnny1Mover 12 years ago
It seems to me that we often make too much of what people are thinking, when the real test is what we do.

I sometimes read stories on literotica and used to read the Sports Illustrated Swimsuit Edition. Should my wife get angry with me and refuse to sleep with me because I had some fantasy? I don't think so, and I doubt most of you do either. Why? Because we all have fantasies and punishing someone for something you do yourself is just not right. In this story it wasn't a fantasy. But the plain fact of the matter is she didn't go through with it. She didn't commit adultery. Now you can say that she would have, if .... You can also say she never would have if she hadn't seen her husband with another woman. I don't think the wife should be taken to account for something that didn't happen. Holding people accountable for things they may have thought about but never carried out is a way to break up every marriage that ever existed. I think that if the husband had even a little compassion for his wife, he would have to forgive her. Again, I ask you if the roles were reversed, what would you think?

Suppose a husband had his first wife cheat on him and it devastated him. Years later he sees his 2nd wife coming out of a hotel room with a younger very handsome man. What would you or anyone else think? Seriously, would any of you doubt what had just happened? So if the husband then plans to have a revenge fuck, but for whatever reason doesn't do it, would you still think divorce is the only solution? No, I think that this is akin to breaking up with your boyfriend because he fantasized about a Swimsuit model. The husband comes across as a self righteous prig.

Had the husband forgiven her, I doubt that she would ever behave this way again. She would certainly never jump to conclusions again. But say what you will, she really did have a good reason to believe he was unfaithful. Reading the comments and saying what should or shouldn't happen is almost as entertaining as the story itself.

imhaplessimhaplessover 12 years ago
Sam is a miserable character

Your character Sam is a horrible human being; he hides something that important from his wife who he then criticizes for not "talking everything out" with, and then goes ballistic. Why did he bother to rush and stop her from having sex if he was going to leave her for failure to do the same thing he failed to do -- talk? If this were real life Elaine would have been much better without that asshole.

cpetecpeteover 12 years ago
Lots of Stuff

Well done. You pulled the whole hat trik of emotions, jealousy, betrayal, revenge, shock, guilt, remourse and the great twist at the end.

Posters can argue forever over -could have/should have/ would have-but it was a nice story, good plot, well written and interesting to the very end.

please write more!

MissouriUSAMissouriUSAover 12 years ago
Good Story!

The wife was going for the "kill". She had him "tried, convicted, and sentenced" without ever giving him a chance to defend himself. She was over the top with venom and hate. That being the case, I think that the husband's response is not out of line.

It is chasten's story and that is the way he wrote it. He could have put in a reconciliation at the end and it might have worked as well. I could have seen it going that way with no problem at all. But it was chasten's story and I enjoyed the ending the way that he wrote it.

MissouriUSA

huedogghuedoggalmost 13 years ago
looking at some of the past comment makes me wonder where the men are

I guess strong men are dead and it's the new metrosexuals now, OHIO made a comment a couple of years ago about punishing the husband, that comment was "gay". He met his kid alone, so fucking what! He is a bad husband for caring about his kid. They never met till that day, because she wanted to talk to him alone it a bad thing. Please grow some balls. 5 Stars

PultoyPultoyover 13 years ago
Well Done!

I enjoy your abrupt style and conversations. Very good.

Thanks.

-Pultoy

AnonymousAnonymousabout 14 years ago
assumed

she assumed and the premise was incorrect. consequences. nicely done.

RonRWoodRonRWoodalmost 15 years ago
Great Story

What she intended to do to a man she supposedly loved was way over the top as he said. That was the crux of the story!

Sure she had experienced a husband cheating on her before. But, she failed to verify the actual cheating she suspected and then lost the marriage by going over the top to get revenge... On a man she loved?

What else is there? She intended to humilate him whether she did so or not! That is not love... Better to forgive and be a wimp if you love someone! How can anyone want to destroy the one they love? Is real love all this easy to obtain? I haven't found it to be so in 65 years... Love is sacrifice and wanting the best for the ones you love no matter their failings. Do you all want to hurt your children when they do things you hate? Or is this selfcentered pride of ownership between spouses different than love? You tell me...

I have loved two women through thick and thin and have been abused by both. Was I totally wrong in loving them and still caring no matter what? I did divorce one finally, but not because I hated her or wanted revenge! The love lessened for me as she cheated on me and I found another is all. Why all the pious self-pity and revenge? Although I did learn something from another author or two that said this, "The opposite of love is indifference." So maybe hateful revenge is in fact a demonstration of love! Someone help me out here... My head is hurting!

ohioohioalmost 15 years ago
second thoughts about this one

Not about the story but about the ending: If I were Elaine I'd have pursued my husband by finding and talking to the daughter, Susan. She surely would not have felt comfortable that her meetings with her father (and her desire not to meet his wife) would have led to the end of their marriage. I think that she would be a powerful advocate on Elaine's side for forgiveness. Thanks, ohio

KOLKOREKOLKOREalmost 15 years ago
Action and a mind twister combined!

I feel like celebrating. It’s not often that you find an author who demonstrates such a kin sense for the dramatic aspects of story writing. It’s even more extraordinary to find one who can combine it with thoughtful running commentary, carried by the characters. As a result you are not only intrigued by the plot as you read the story, but you also find yourself weighing the moral considerations pertinent to each side of the story <P>

Way to go!

TE_RossTE_Rossalmost 15 years ago
Separation of the hardheads

<p>I liked this story though I did have a problem with the ending. It seems odd to me that a husband would race to prevent his wife from having sex with another man principally because he wants to spare her the guilt once she knows the truth of his other relationship.</p>

<p>How does compassion emanate from one act yet be so completely absent in the other? How could the husband be so rigid in not allowing her to think the worse of him? I thought the husband's long monologue bordered on sanctimonious. He knew her history yet ignored it in the end. She is better off without him too.</p>

<p>Secrets in a marriage are never a good thing. This husband should <b>learn that lesson</b>

in his next relationship.</p>

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 15 years ago
Finally a story with thought put into it

It was well thought out and well presented. All the explanations are there, the readers just have to look for them. Now I have to read the rest of your stuff. anon jerry

dreamcatcher101dreamcatcher101almost 15 years ago
A sad but only realistic conclusion

I have read the story 3 times to get why He really was not taking Her back .. And I agree with all His reasons..I am kind of surprised at OHIO's momment,it realy did not sound like him..Sadly there was no communication with between the Wife and Husband..If Sam and Susan would have been Lovers He would have kissed Her on the mouth not the cheek..Even rereading the phone conversation,to me it did not sound like they were Lovers,.Elaine would have found out that very evening who the Girl was,thats what Sam told Susan on the phone due to Elaine's Parents being there on Sunday,but then SHE decided to end the marriage in the most imagenitive vicious and evil way possible by mentally torturing Sam with the play by play discription of her ending the marriage..So She didnt fuck Tom but She had full intentions to do that,and by the way how and why did She know Tom's home or cell number to phone him that saturday??? And why did She tell Tom that She was divorced already??? Thats why He intended to sleep with Her because Tom thought that She was single,even He found out what a liar She was..That was missed in all the comments..If Sam would not have found Elaine at the Motel She certainly would have been fucking by 6 oclock,and the marriage would be over anyways..Sam fully explained why he was leaving Her,at first I thought too that it was her viscious and vindictive glee Elaine showed when Sam tried to talk to her in the Motelroom leaving Sam only with deflated anger and despair begging "Dont do this Elaine.Please I want to tell..." As She cut him off,She never let Him explain..Thats when I thought He made His decision to leave Her..and I couldnt blame him for that,She made it perfectly clear that She didnt love Him at that point as She was going to fuck Tom anyways and if Sam tried to stop them She was going to scream and get the Cops to throw Him in Jail for the night so that She could then have seconds from Tom in the morning..I dont know why so many of the readers are calling Sam a jerk ??? Why is Sam to blame for what the Slut is trying to do to Him ??? I guess they just be happier if She had come home to feed Him some creampie like so many whimp stories lovers on LW like reading on here..He was no whimp.. He saw his options and toke the only choice He had..If someone treats you like crap and endangers your life with std's by screwing someone outside the marriage,""remember that was Her intend"",even though we all can feel sorry for Her at the end..You dont have to stay with someone no matter how much You love them .. He made the right choice..Great story, chasten I enjoyed reading it.. Only other thing is,that I wonder what Susan thought what She got into here as She was supposed to meet her Dads new loving Wife ?? Interesting question there...lol

kelly_kellykelly_kellyalmost 15 years ago
Just Checking, I hope you don't mind.

Thank you to all those who have sent me mails about how to break the comment into paragraph<p>It'll be more fun to comment on a story now<p> I'm enjoying it.

bruce22bruce22almost 15 years ago
Excellent Read

Really well written and well plotted! My tendency is to close ranks with Sam, though I would have told Tom to wait a couple of minutes. One thing is that people who have been through problems do not necessarily learn, many become overly sensitive and fearful so that it takes but the guy to move a bottle from one shelf to another for them to conclude the worse about the guy and the future! Therefore I would say it was a very real tale, and I doubt that they would ever learn to communicate... They were lucky this one was not back in the "good old days", the coroner would have had three bodies to deal with...

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 15 years ago
After reading the comments I realize a lot did not

understand. He didnt rush to keep her from having a revenge fuck to save their marriage. He rushed to her to prevent her doing it, then getting a divorce, and later finding out it was his daughter and her not being able to live with herself for destroying their marriage and her self respect. He saved her from herself and the reasons for divorcing her were still good she was not really in love with and did not respect or trust her spouse..

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 15 years ago
Its really as shame this woman assumes all men

cheat on their marriage. As the husband indicated, it clearly shows her lack of love and trust of him to assume her husband was cheating and not talk to him about it. He was dealing with one set of problems without letting his wife know, a mistake on his part. She on the other hand decided on revenge. Fucking someone outside the marriage is never a good revenge, actually it is stupid on to many counts to get into. He actually took the best action he could with an immature woman that did not trust him enough, love him enough, nor respect him enough. Divorce in this case was the only option, they could have sought marriage counseling as some say, but then why put off the marriage a couple of years and waste the money in the mean time? Marriage counseling and reconciliations seldom work for long, eventually the marriage breaks down and divorce happens. This marriage is already broken by the actions of the wife.

Vulcan_in_OhioVulcan_in_Ohioalmost 15 years ago
Good story, ignore the hateful comments.

Something like this story was done by Cloacas called, "The Prenuptial Agreement." I liked this version just as much. I won't repeat the comments by others but I think it was well-written and hit the nail on the head. In any marital conflict, it is unusual that one partner is 100% right and the other is 100% wrong. Usually there is a mixture, and each bears some responsibility for the disagreement. Hubby was more right than wrong but he wasn't perfect, and it seems lots of other readers thought so too. As some other readers have wondered, I am not clear as-to why he races to the motel to prevent her from having sex with Tom, then divorces her anyway. The same could have been achieved without the trip to the motel -- or maybe, he just wanted her to feel guilty and wanted her to hurt (best done with a confrontation), so he chose this way to end his marriage. Lots of levels here. Thanks for writing.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 15 years ago
As Deep As It Could Be - KUDO's Author

I sorry but I don't understand the readers faulting him and the author.<P>

The author explains it quite clearly later in the story in retrospect - did they not read the entire story?<P>

Author - you are appreciated and now looked forward to due to the consequence you levied which is always a result of every action taken - small & large - Good or Bad. That's reality & life at its basic.<P>

With High Regard

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 15 years ago
Huh?!?!

Really confused. Guys an ass in the end. Broad is a bitch for assuming. The whole world here is fucked up.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 15 years ago
I must not live in the real world

Her response was so over the top to suspecting him of cheating it's just sick. Calling it "rather reasonable" pretty much gives me the same opinion of your judgement. Personally I think he should have done more to her. Why bother to try to save her from herself-that's what he was doing-when she's literally trying to torture him not just have revenge sex? Good writing but the guy was too understanding of her.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 15 years ago
An excellent story.

It's just to show what can happen when two people stop communicating with each other. I hope they both find happiness should they marry again. Cheers.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 15 years ago
By a bit, he's a bigger asshole

Yes, maybe she should have confronted him with her suspicions, but he knew of her history with her first husband. He knew what that did to her. Give that, breaking up with her for acting in what would be a rather reasonable response is low.

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