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Last time I checked Edinburgh wasn't in England. Ask a real Scot where it is or better yet, do your geography homework.

Your structure is good, your grammar is more than passable but your knowledge of your subject matter seems a little immature. Nothing wrong with that! One day you'll be looking fondly back upon the days when you were young enough for immaturity to be acceptable :) You have the makings of a decent writer - don't stop...just research and write about what you know well. Then you can immerse yourself in the topic - readers can feel a writers involvement and conviction in a story. Also, remember that sometimes, after releasing your creativity from the confines of education it can find it hard to fly again... let it take wing...

Good luck!