All Comments on 'Secret No Longer Ch. 16'

This is very, very good. Read last 2 chapters first, will go back to start and read all. Thanks!

<p>This was good until here where either Fred is really just a really dumb f*ck, or the author just can't write Fred properly.

<p>Fred is presented one fact:</p>

<p>Sammy knows, lets it happen and doesn't bother telling Fred.</p>

<p>Anyone with even an ounce of brain knows Sammy can't be trusted since he sided and tacitly (or not) supported Linda.</p>

<p>Hell, by not telling, he might as well have held her legs open for Jason! That's the same level of guilt!!</p>

<p>In fact, in Fred's mind Sammy might even be getting a piece of Linda.</p>

<p>Of course, Fred doesn't even bother calling Sammie out on this and even apologizes to him!</p>

<p>Sadly, I'm apt to think that you just had to gloss that bit over to get the ending you want, and not were the story should really be going.</p>

Why does Fred have no idea what the cause, and his role in it, might be? Isn't this the same father who, along with his neighbor, was enjoying the pictures his son was providing both he and sammy, of his wife, his son's mother, getting off with sammy's wife? did he somehow think his son wasn't enjoying the pix too? did he somehow think that encouraging this voyeurism wasn't tacit approval for his son to lust after linda? that seems incredibly naive.

<p>Perfectly good points; you're just thinking ahead of the story a bit. Those things turn up in the next chapter with Fred and Sammy, which should be 18. </p><p>

Looking over what I have written of that chapter, though, I see I should move some things earlier, partly to get these issues you raise addressed, so for that I'm grateful for your bringing them to my attention.

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One clarification: Fred's remorseful apology to God and Sammy refers solely to the extremes of his verbal attack upon his son and his wife. He believes in that old saying, hate the sin but love the sinner, (and his and Linda's shared adherence to its spirit is one factor in the strength of their marriage before all this), and is ashamed of himself for abandoning it, despite the provocation. It's quite immaterial what justification one person or another may argue exists for some of it; it was pure rage talking, and that is something he had always sworn to avoid.</p>

A post to this area arguing for reactions based on pride, ego, control and revenge has been deleted.

I can kinda get Fred feeling partially responsible as he didn't make a big deal out of the Linda's lesbian affair and didn't discourage his son from spying and photographing the whole thing, but I don't understand his willingness to forgive Jason, Sammy and Jannie's role in the whole train wreck as Sammy obviously knew of everything going on and kept quiet and Jason was a participant.

Even though it is a fictional story it is my belief that real world consequences must apply since this story wasn't posted under Sci-Fi/Fantasy. I think most stories that follow this line should be posted as fantasy allowing the author the freedom of creating a lore, making alien emotional responses somewhat more believable. The story is however well constructed and written.

Rarely have I read greater nonsense about concealing or minimizing a human crime. "hate the sin but love the sinner" that's exactly the thinking of people who don't care about rules and norms at all.

What this mother has done does not make her a martyr but a criminal. So don't talk about sin and sinners when you mean crime! And above all, don't try to legalize the crime of incest!