All Comments on 'Shaken from the Bed'

Made no sense.. hahaha. royalty wearing denim?

SNORE.

Hi,

I liked this story: it was mysterious and confusing,

and had a great atmosphere. If there was one thing

wrong with it, it was that it seemed to be over far

too quickly. After such a fine build-up, the final

taking was too quick!

-lb.

i enjoyed it,although im suprised its listed under the category its in,i figured something like this would be under the "Nonhuman" listings

Hi I really enjoyed this (though I need to assume she survived)

The randomness does imply it is part of a larger story. It is part vampire but could also have crime elements of home invasion, of bad girls on the lam, holding her hostage while the heat dies down. (outside anyway)

I instantly liked the vampire characters. A bit punk.

One suggestion: Move the looking in the mirror paragraph to just after the knock. It was a bit odd just following the explosion. She could also be checking that her guilt was not as obvious in her head as in her own mind.

There was some character build up; the the critical point is, do we understand why she chose to leave the device in when she opened the door? I wasn't fully convinced but the clues were there I think.