All Comments on 'She Learns to Love Thunder'

Well told. Thank You. Ronnie W.

Read your story, first the tank top comes off then in the next paragraph, it is slide down...otherwise good

Misspellings, poor grammar, and awkward phrasing made it a difficult read.

Poor continuity. First she's wearing white jean shorts. Two paragraphs later they morph into black spandex? Tank top is off, tank top is on. Poor grammar and awful misspellings. Good story idea, although with the name, I assumed the storm would be mentioned more. Try again.