All Comments on 'She Told Him No Fucking... Ch. 01'

I really enjoyed this short story. You bring the reader right into the moment, and it's very hot and sensual. Great job!

Unless you want me crazy with desire ... Hey there Scotsman, checking out your work coz I see you checking out mine, and I like it! Your dialogue is good - you're right about that. All those little Scottish bits are doing it for me - and the sex is super hot too (you and I have the same bottom fetish I fear). Well done! Lisae

hey, you left a comment on my page, and WOW, this story was brilliant, i didnt even manage to finish it before i came. i really enjoyed reading it.

marielit

x

p.s. what are oxters?

The writing is excellent; the sex, luscious. Don't stop now!

Incredibly wild. You got the rhythm perfectly. One of the hottest stories I've read in a long time.

Completely hypnotizing. Brilliant writing. Can't wait to read the next installment.

I like this a LOT ... Willie is exactly the right combination of agression, passion, and good manners <lol>. Deliciously hot, Scotsman Another great beginning!

I really LOVE your writing, it is so exciting and draws me right in!

Thank you. I MUST read the rest of your stories now!

yOU DON'T HAVE TO WORRY ABOUT YOUR WRITING SKILL. yOU WRITE VERY WELL. i WOULD ONLY SUGGEST, IN THE INTEREST OF REALITY, THAT YOU HAVE YOUR HERO CUT BACK A BIT ON THE DRINKING. hE STARTED OUT WITH SCOTCH, THEN BEER THEN WINE TEN MORE SCOTCH. aNY NORMAL MAN WOULD BE UNDER THE TABLE IF HE DRANK ALL THAT YOUR HERO DRANK . gOOD STORY THOUGH.

THE cT. YANKEE

do it to me

again...so realistic. I'm drawn into the scene, and can feel his need. Going on to read Ch 2 ;)

Love your hero. He certainly can seduce women into submission.

Good story. I like the sexual tension you created, wondering if she would return to the bar, what she meant by "no fucking", raising the issue of what she really wanted.

Your use of language somehow makes the story seem more real. Real places, unusual words, it's like it is an actual recollection.

Love the build up, the teasing. Nicely done ;)