by Scotsman69
Good story. I like the sexual tension you created, wondering if she would return to the bar, what she meant by "no fucking", raising the issue of what she really wanted.
Your use of language somehow makes the story seem more real. Real places, unusual words, it's like it is an actual recollection.
again...so realistic. I'm drawn into the scene, and can feel his need. Going on to read Ch 2 ;)
yOU DON'T HAVE TO WORRY ABOUT YOUR WRITING SKILL. yOU WRITE VERY WELL. i WOULD ONLY SUGGEST, IN THE INTEREST OF REALITY, THAT YOU HAVE YOUR HERO CUT BACK A BIT ON THE DRINKING. hE STARTED OUT WITH SCOTCH, THEN BEER THEN WINE TEN MORE SCOTCH. aNY NORMAL MAN WOULD BE UNDER THE TABLE IF HE DRANK ALL THAT YOUR HERO DRANK . gOOD STORY THOUGH.
THE cT. YANKEE
I really LOVE your writing, it is so exciting and draws me right in!
I like this a LOT ... Willie is exactly the right combination of agression, passion, and good manners <lol>. Deliciously hot, Scotsman Another great beginning!
Completely hypnotizing. Brilliant writing. Can't wait to read the next installment.
Incredibly wild. You got the rhythm perfectly. One of the hottest stories I've read in a long time.
The writing is excellent; the sex, luscious. Don't stop now!
hey, you left a comment on my page, and WOW, this story was brilliant, i didnt even manage to finish it before i came. i really enjoyed reading it.
marielit
x
p.s. what are oxters?
Unless you want me crazy with desire ... Hey there Scotsman, checking out your work coz I see you checking out mine, and I like it! Your dialogue is good - you're right about that. All those little Scottish bits are doing it for me - and the sex is super hot too (you and I have the same bottom fetish I fear). Well done! Lisae
I really enjoyed this short story. You bring the reader right into the moment, and it's very hot and sensual. Great job!