All Comments on 'Simple Seduction'

I hope you add more to this story. I wanna know what happens between these two LOL

Great start! Hope to see more.

Very good dialog, character development and pacing. Interesting start on what might be a very good plot.

It is a good start, with excellent dialog. However, I think you ended this (hopefully) first chapter a little too soon. It just stops, with no entry into what might follow. It almost seems like you just quit writing at this point.

Yes, he does admit she is an interesting person, but ........... ?

I AM HOOKED. cant wait to read more!

Your spelling is horrible. SpellCheck doesn't work when the word you use {"quite"} is not the word you wanted {"quiet"}. Your Grammer and punctuation isn't much better. Cute intro, but no "hook" You ought to be able to do better.

I think some of the readers forget that not all writers have editors and that sometimes little spelling mistakes get overlooked. What I found disturbing was anonymus complaining about your spelling, yet he or she can't spell the word grammar correctly. Keep up the good work. It is a good beginning and I would love to see where you take the story.

Anna

before criticizing about spelling and grammar please learn to proof yourself. I loved this intro and I'm eager to see where it goes.

Great beginning, but does need some editing.