All Comments on 'Sisterly Need'

Hello there. Firstly, I just wanted to say welcome to the community. Always nice to see the work of a newcomer, especially if the newcomer has a knack for writing. Speaking of which, this brings me to my second point: nice job on the first submission. By no means was it perfect, but it was a darn good start.<br><br>The way your narrator told the story was eloquent and convincing. On top of that, the personality of the main character was refreshingly different from those in other stories. She wanted sex, and although she was reluctant to admit it, she knew her brother was the only man for her. I'm certain it's been done before, but as far as I'm concerned, it isn't done often. Nicely done there.<br><br>I liked how the mention of their past sexual encounter was laid out; i.e., not too many details. It happened, she's fixated on it, and the rest is left to the reader's imagination. However, therein lies a weakness in this story, in my opinion.<br><br>Your style definitely has strength in its eloquence, however I felt that you simply didn't go into enough detail. Sure, you got us inside the narrator's head--and that's an important thing for any writer to do--but as for the "action," I felt it was a bit lacking. This is coming from a guy who loves traveling the verbose-route (just look at the length of this comment. shit.), so take my criticism with a grain of salt.<br><br>If your intent is to arouse, experiment with going into more detail with the sex you write. This may clash with your current style, but give it a shot. It makes for a more absorbing read, because by the time I finished reading this piece, I found myself wishing there was a bit more. Take your time when you write, and see what you come up with.<br><br>Overall, I think you did a fine job. I wish you the best of luck with your future works.<br><br>-JM

Short and to the point: I loved the story. For the most part, very well written (one or two spelling errors). The characters were well developed and engaging, with distinct personalities - not quite so "cookie cutter" as some stories have, which is a good thing. The only criticism I would offer would be in agreement with the previous commenter in saying that it could be stretched out and filled out a bit more. Particularly once it got to the action between the brother and sister - it just felt lacking a bit. Overall, however, an excellent first entry - definitely an author to keep an eye on. I look forward to reading more of your work.

more gay anal plz

such a sick story i bet u lick yer dads underwear after he fucks yer aunt you sick whore

Im so jealouse of them to i wish me and my sister would let me fuck her!

Brother/sister incest is the best and your submission ,although,quite short,was just as good and may I say,even better than a lot of the authors on this site.....Please continue writing more.....I'm just a brother who dreams of living life with my dick buried in my older sister forever.........

"The saddest words of mouth or pen are these, 'It might have been.'" That is so true, for instance of siblings who secretly yearn for each other. Like the reader who dreams of spending forever with his fat brotherly cock up his sister's sweet little slit, up to his balls. I bet there are countless brothers and sisters who look over each other and and think, "why not?" Yet they're too crippled by social convention to actually do it. What a pity. The kids grow up together, it's inevitable that they see each other naked from time to time. His pretty sister's adorable little coochie is the first cunt the kid sees, just as her hunky brother's chubby cock and loaded hanging balls are the first male package she ever lays her eyes on. Maybe they play "I'll show you mine if you show me yours," and sis even gets to see her big brother's big hard on. That's sure to get her juices streaming down her slender thighs and cute little ass. And still the stern voice of a puritanical society keeps the boy from just shoving his hard on up his sister's tight little twat and blowing his brotherly balls up inside the little darling. Crazy, right? Those few who, like Sasha and Eric in this excellent story laugh at the idiotic taboo get to experience the pride of a boy who fucks his sister to one great cum after another and a girl who goes around filled to the brim with her own brother's semen.